5/4/2010 c8 11Jessiquie
haha so i absoutely loved the line "People tend to sue us when we do that." The fact that its clearly happened before combined with the nochantly way it was said made it so much more amusing. Loved it.

In terms of consturctutive critism and the rest, your missing something in the piece of dialogue where Chloe says: "I'm pretty sure I hanging onto the puzzle for dear life." Its obvious what it is, but as a writer myself I'd like to think that readers might point them out once in a while. Same goes with a bit further down where you have "my mom'll kill me". While in every day speech i udnerstand that this is how we talk, I'm not so sure it translates or is recieved well via the written word, so prob better to stick with mum will. Plus his a snotty rich brat who clearly would be pushing his supreiorty on to others and using his high and propper vocab as a way of pointing out how much better he is.

Also you've got "parents' castle of a house." Personally, and i know I'm being a pain - I've just been working on alot of honors stuff so I'm sort of in that mind frame, i think this description (which I love by the way) would work better if the phrase was reversed. As he stepped into the castle his parents called a house. Just a thought.

naww Kurt is so cute with Chloe. Adorable. He's grown one me :) Though theres something about Nihar's mother and his reactions that I can't quite put my finger on ... I sort of think at time there might be soemthing there. And then theres Adam! I love the descriptiona nd cahracter summing up that CHloe's roomate gave. Defintely some food for thought there. Not mention slightly romantic and just plain sweet.

I've experienced the sort of pain that Chloe's going through when you loose a friend, a best friend of a substanial period. I've also been on the side that Adam's on and hated the feeling of thinking you were no longer needed and watching helplessly as you slowly drifted apart. So keeping that in mind, kudos on keeping it so realistic.

I know in your author note you said you won't be updating for a while, but I hope you change your mind. I love this story and can't wait to see what happens over the weekend. Good luck in your exams.

4/3/2010 c6 LIMH
This chapter was a really good read. Nihar was so mean and nasty though...and Kurt bewilders me. He really is no better than Nihar. And what is it with them getting involved with her business. Yeah, I don't like Marcus, but why did Kurt have to show him the photos? Why are they getting involved in her personal life? And then Kurt's behaviour is all vague at the end. What the Hell? And Nihar showing Adam the photos as well..I don't understand what they have to gain by doing that..Adam also over reacted a little in my opinion.

Anyway, update fast will you? Please?

3/31/2010 c6 IfTheShoeFits-WearIt
yay an update! x)

nihar is one big meanie saying all them insults to her

but i still like Kurt :) hopefully shell make up with adam soon though, that bit made me sad :'(

3/31/2010 c6 7Le Tigre
I really like this story, t'is good and very well written. Kudos to you.

I feel sorry for Chloe though, the rich kids seem to be manipulating her into taking money and now she's lost her friends. I don't really mind about Marcus, I didn't really like him, he was such a user.

At the moment, I like Kurt for Chloe he seems to be the nicest out of him and Nihar and the little hints about him possible liking her are cute in a slightly unconventional way.

I can't wait for the next chapter to come out!

Congratulations Colie!

2/20/2010 c5 11Jessiquie
This chapter defintely perked my day up. Had a friends 21st last night and been buggered all day, finally decided to do something worth while and read this. Loved every second of it. Please update soon!

Lol, I do love a challenge and really who doesn't love a nap.

On to more serious stuff, hope your feeling better than when you wrote/posted this chapter.

I really enjoyed the ending of this chapter. The little convo between Kurt and Chloe was so deep and I don't know, it kind of resounded with me.

I love that you end each chapter with 'Congratulations, Chloe.' Its so unique and clever.

2/20/2010 c5 LIMH
Good Chapter! It was more fast paced than the others which is really good, but I don't want it to get faster than this. Some of your characters really own their pieces of dialogue i.e Kurt and Nihar so it's OK when the dialogue is longer when it comes to them - well in my opinion.For the other characters involved in Chloe's life, the dialogue can be long enough for us to understand their relationship with her and what not, but that's it. Don't make it too long. I guess I should have said this before, but this chapter really showed that when more emphasis is placed on Chloe, Nihar and Kurt, things just are more interesting.

Anyway, the dialogue was again really funny showing how desperate Chloe was for money, demanding to be paid for her name and Kurt actually adding the $5 to the $90. When Chloe asked the hostess how much she made an hour, that was also really funny, cause here she was in some high class restaurant like some big shot and she's asking a really low class question one would expect from somebody like me. Nihar introducing her as "Asian" to his parents was also hilarious. Is he just dumb or did he really think that was her name? Her conversation with Kurt was nice, I mean they were talking to each other like they were humans and the fact that she caught his attention by saying that he had control issues was very interesting.

Really looking forward to the next chapter and to see what happens at that party with Chloe and Nihar. See? I left you a nice, long review.

2/8/2010 c4 LIMH
Marcus really sickens my soul. I don't like him. And the dialogue between Chloe and Kurt was funny. "No, I like to read about people in need of help and laugh." That one had me in giggles. And Chloe pinching Nihar's cheek in the end was hilarious. I could see the scene in my head.