for Congratulations, Chloe2/3/2010 c4 IfTheShoeFits-WearIt
For some reason im coming around to kurt :\
can we have some karen next time? she makes me smile (:
great chappy as usual! xx
For some reason im coming around to kurt :\
can we have some karen next time? she makes me smile (:
great chappy as usual! xx
1/24/2010 c3 LIMH
Good chapter! I'm somewhat charmed by Kurt's ability to solve puzzles and by the way he was momentarily distracted from his real purpose for visiting Chloe so he could solve the "flivver" puzzle. Is it OK to think he's hot? He isn't going to be a really bad guy in this story, is he? I don't think you'll answer that.
Good chapter! I'm somewhat charmed by Kurt's ability to solve puzzles and by the way he was momentarily distracted from his real purpose for visiting Chloe so he could solve the "flivver" puzzle. Is it OK to think he's hot? He isn't going to be a really bad guy in this story, is he? I don't think you'll answer that.
1/20/2010 c2 
11Jessiquie
haha. marcus annoys me. I think its his attiutde and the fact that his a player. And maybe, just maybe, since we know that Chloe's in love with him and waiting for him to realise he's in love with her. Which i don't think will happen, hence the annoyance with him. Though strangely enough he reminds me of one of my friends, so hes realistic enough.
Adam also seems somewhat more of a friend sometimes. I know his the best friend, and that the was a reference to them possibly having been more than a friend once (though i get teh impression it was somewhat akin to a drunk accident), but yeah, I'm thinking his maybe wanting to be more than a friend.
anyways interesting developments. can't wait to see where this goes...
11Jessiquiehaha. marcus annoys me. I think its his attiutde and the fact that his a player. And maybe, just maybe, since we know that Chloe's in love with him and waiting for him to realise he's in love with her. Which i don't think will happen, hence the annoyance with him. Though strangely enough he reminds me of one of my friends, so hes realistic enough.
Adam also seems somewhat more of a friend sometimes. I know his the best friend, and that the was a reference to them possibly having been more than a friend once (though i get teh impression it was somewhat akin to a drunk accident), but yeah, I'm thinking his maybe wanting to be more than a friend.
anyways interesting developments. can't wait to see where this goes...
1/20/2010 c1 Jessiquie
haha I love the disney reference at the begining of this chapter. No girl (or boy i guess too) can ever out grow disney. Loved it.
lol, anyways on to other matters. I really liked this. Your writing is really witty, your characterisations great. You have a way with words. I loved it really.
I did pick up on one typo though..."leaving me leaning again the Brian Tracy Building" - i'm assuming again is supposed to be against. But thats all. I would offer you some more cosntructive critism, but I seriously don't have any. I really did enjoy it. Though I am a bit confused with the end bit. It really does seem as Nihar is a stalker. But when he's following her and Adam after the end of the shift and their playing up on what he thinks and stuff, and then Marcus appears, if her and marcus are into each other, why didn't he react to the whole "You really are his bitch” comment? Because he was there, but he just seems to let it slide and all that.
anyways on to the next one :)
haha I love the disney reference at the begining of this chapter. No girl (or boy i guess too) can ever out grow disney. Loved it.
lol, anyways on to other matters. I really liked this. Your writing is really witty, your characterisations great. You have a way with words. I loved it really.
I did pick up on one typo though..."leaving me leaning again the Brian Tracy Building" - i'm assuming again is supposed to be against. But thats all. I would offer you some more cosntructive critism, but I seriously don't have any. I really did enjoy it. Though I am a bit confused with the end bit. It really does seem as Nihar is a stalker. But when he's following her and Adam after the end of the shift and their playing up on what he thinks and stuff, and then Marcus appears, if her and marcus are into each other, why didn't he react to the whole "You really are his bitch” comment? Because he was there, but he just seems to let it slide and all that.
anyways on to the next one :)
1/9/2010 c2 4Paige Cruz
all around hilarious. :)
Nihar is such a bully. Him and his minion-err, Kurt. But why do I get the feeling that Chloe is a very impulsive girl? hahaha...
Good work. ^^
4Paige Cruzall around hilarious. :)
Nihar is such a bully. Him and his minion-err, Kurt. But why do I get the feeling that Chloe is a very impulsive girl? hahaha...
Good work. ^^
1/9/2010 c2 IfTheShoeFits-WearIt
ahh i love this story!
she kinda reminds me of me by how much she talks to herself in her head lol. i wish i could stand up to people like her though :P
is adam just a friend? or more?
xoxo
ahh i love this story!
she kinda reminds me of me by how much she talks to herself in her head lol. i wish i could stand up to people like her though :P
is adam just a friend? or more?
xoxo
1/9/2010 c1 LIMH
I definitely want to see where this story is going although at the moment I'm a little confused. And I don't know if Nihar is just stupid or something but aren't Indians Asians too? I mean India is located in South Asia. Lots of Indians refer to themselves as Asian. He sounds really hot though. That Marcus dude sounds creepy and Adam appears to be a really sweet guy.
I definitely want to see where this story is going although at the moment I'm a little confused. And I don't know if Nihar is just stupid or something but aren't Indians Asians too? I mean India is located in South Asia. Lots of Indians refer to themselves as Asian. He sounds really hot though. That Marcus dude sounds creepy and Adam appears to be a really sweet guy.
1/8/2010 c2 33BringTheBing
I liked this chapter a lot once again:) I think the first was a little better, but this one seems to be setting stuff up more (I think... lol!) I'm getting a sudden hatred for Marcus.. he seems like the typical playa... with blue hair lol! Adam and Chloe's relationship really confuses me, I think he's not as interesting as the other guys in the story (except for Marcus!) but you should totally make sure he is since he's her bestie (I'm pretty sure?). Hope this helps:)
33BringTheBingI liked this chapter a lot once again:) I think the first was a little better, but this one seems to be setting stuff up more (I think... lol!) I'm getting a sudden hatred for Marcus.. he seems like the typical playa... with blue hair lol! Adam and Chloe's relationship really confuses me, I think he's not as interesting as the other guys in the story (except for Marcus!) but you should totally make sure he is since he's her bestie (I'm pretty sure?). Hope this helps:)
1/8/2010 c2 7Rhapsody's Song
I like this story. It's definitely different, though I feel like Chloe needs to dump Marcus. Still, I like the point of view you have on this and the characters. They are not at all cliche and I look forward to reading more :)
7Rhapsody's SongI like this story. It's definitely different, though I feel like Chloe needs to dump Marcus. Still, I like the point of view you have on this and the characters. They are not at all cliche and I look forward to reading more :)
1/5/2010 c1 20groundhog591
Wow. This is really interesting and hilarious! :D Love it! I would love to see where this is going!
20groundhog591Wow. This is really interesting and hilarious! :D Love it! I would love to see where this is going!
1/5/2010 c1 33BringTheBing
I really like it:) I'm really confused about where it's going to go, but if the rest of the story is as good as this, then it'll be really really good! I love Marcus, he's confusing (I don't get his hair:)) but he seems really cool! Chloe seems a little... sparkly? Obviously she's her own person yet she's a little cliched. But I really like that:) Keep writing!
33BringTheBingI really like it:) I'm really confused about where it's going to go, but if the rest of the story is as good as this, then it'll be really really good! I love Marcus, he's confusing (I don't get his hair:)) but he seems really cool! Chloe seems a little... sparkly? Obviously she's her own person yet she's a little cliched. But I really like that:) Keep writing!
1/4/2010 c1 7Faithfully Yours
I really enjoyed this first chapter! I'm really excited to see where it leads. :)
7Faithfully YoursI really enjoyed this first chapter! I'm really excited to see where it leads. :)