4/25/2012 c34 citygrl
i really do love this story. every time you post a new chapter i read it and then proceed to re-read the entire story. just so you know.
as i was reading again i have a couple of questions:
1. where exactly do they live? you've mentioned their by the ocean but not an exact location.
2. are you going to close the loop on max's biological father?
and i think i had one or two more but now i cannot remember them. maybe they'll come back to me :) i do love this story & hope you'll post another chapter soon!
i really do love this story. every time you post a new chapter i read it and then proceed to re-read the entire story. just so you know.
as i was reading again i have a couple of questions:
1. where exactly do they live? you've mentioned their by the ocean but not an exact location.
2. are you going to close the loop on max's biological father?
and i think i had one or two more but now i cannot remember them. maybe they'll come back to me :) i do love this story & hope you'll post another chapter soon!
4/24/2012 c34 372898
I don't know if you noticed, but you use the word "y'all" a lot towards the beginning of this chapter. Still lovin' it though!
I don't know if you noticed, but you use the word "y'all" a lot towards the beginning of this chapter. Still lovin' it though!
4/24/2012 c34 3C0l1E3N
Geeze! Give me a heart attack why don't you? I'll have no more of this "The End" nonsense!
Geeze! Give me a heart attack why don't you? I'll have no more of this "The End" nonsense!
4/24/2012 c34 1Saraco
Daaaaaang! now there's the chapter we've (I've) been waiting for. So good keep writing.
Daaaaaang! now there's the chapter we've (I've) been waiting for. So good keep writing.
4/24/2012 c34 1Fario
Ahhh, yet another great chapter! I wonder if there will be some sort of confrontation between Jack and Colton? That would be pretty dramatic! Or Jack coming back to confess his feelings and apologise? Now my imagination is turning into a soap-opera... :)
But anyway, can't wait for the next chapter! And more Rainy! I love all three of them (Ten, Colt & Rainy) spending time together!
Ahhh, yet another great chapter! I wonder if there will be some sort of confrontation between Jack and Colton? That would be pretty dramatic! Or Jack coming back to confess his feelings and apologise? Now my imagination is turning into a soap-opera... :)
But anyway, can't wait for the next chapter! And more Rainy! I love all three of them (Ten, Colt & Rainy) spending time together!
4/3/2012 c2 6kaitlintaylor
I think this is interesting though I have yet to finish the story. Just two things: one, don't forget commas, semicolons, periods. Sometimes your sentences are long-and even if they were short- you still need pauses, because it seems as if the character speaking just says it all in one breath. Second, I've noticed Tenley always growls; is she a wolf? Maybe you could use other words aside from growl, but are similar in thought. But overall, this is good.
I think this is interesting though I have yet to finish the story. Just two things: one, don't forget commas, semicolons, periods. Sometimes your sentences are long-and even if they were short- you still need pauses, because it seems as if the character speaking just says it all in one breath. Second, I've noticed Tenley always growls; is she a wolf? Maybe you could use other words aside from growl, but are similar in thought. But overall, this is good.