for Wanted will be taken down!2/4/2014 c9 Augusta
I love this story; however, you mix up your words sometimes. In one of the previous chapters you typed "feat" when it should have been "feet". You also have a tendency to use the wrong there(place)/their(possessive pronoun)/they're(contraction meaning "they are"). These are pretty minor mistakes, most likely typos. You're such a great writer-don't let a small thing like typos get in the way!
I love this story; however, you mix up your words sometimes. In one of the previous chapters you typed "feat" when it should have been "feet". You also have a tendency to use the wrong there(place)/their(possessive pronoun)/they're(contraction meaning "they are"). These are pretty minor mistakes, most likely typos. You're such a great writer-don't let a small thing like typos get in the way!
6/1/2013 c23 
9AKhwab
I feel you about the part where you said you aren't as gifted as all the other authors on Fictionpress! I too spend more time reading instead of writing. But you're really creative, innovative and hardworking. Good job :)
9AKhwabI feel you about the part where you said you aren't as gifted as all the other authors on Fictionpress! I too spend more time reading instead of writing. But you're really creative, innovative and hardworking. Good job :)
6/1/2013 c22 AKhwab
This story has been wonderful :) Your chapters are still steeped with mistakes though. You have spelling errors here & there. And you seem to like to use "your" instead of "you're" or "you are". It kinda annoying to read that. I like how you never changed Sam. She always remained independent in her way. I've gotta say tho, the chemistry between Sam & Marcus isn't really obvious in the entire story. You've got to work on that :) You know the family tree you mentioned in this chapter? What did the dotted line mean? I'm looking forward to the sequel! :D Hopefully, it'll contain lesser mistakes.
This story has been wonderful :) Your chapters are still steeped with mistakes though. You have spelling errors here & there. And you seem to like to use "your" instead of "you're" or "you are". It kinda annoying to read that. I like how you never changed Sam. She always remained independent in her way. I've gotta say tho, the chemistry between Sam & Marcus isn't really obvious in the entire story. You've got to work on that :) You know the family tree you mentioned in this chapter? What did the dotted line mean? I'm looking forward to the sequel! :D Hopefully, it'll contain lesser mistakes.
6/1/2013 c1 AKhwab
When I read the title of your chapter, I literally winced cos you spelled 'Prologue' as 'prolougue' but then I read your chapter and I was surprised. I didn't spot any grammar mistakes. You wrote well. Though it's a little confusing.
When I read the title of your chapter, I literally winced cos you spelled 'Prologue' as 'prolougue' but then I read your chapter and I was surprised. I didn't spot any grammar mistakes. You wrote well. Though it's a little confusing.
1/17/2013 c1 jackalomoose
What happened to the newer/edited version you were doing of this story? I thought I had seen it and maybe read some of it, but maybe you took that one down as well? Either way, the story is great.
What happened to the newer/edited version you were doing of this story? I thought I had seen it and maybe read some of it, but maybe you took that one down as well? Either way, the story is great.
9/23/2012 c22 2OrangeKiss
Marvelous story. It was breathtaking. I loved how Marcus and Sam acted all cute together. I hope you'll post the sequel soon! )
OrangeKiss
2OrangeKissMarvelous story. It was breathtaking. I loved how Marcus and Sam acted all cute together. I hope you'll post the sequel soon! )
OrangeKiss
6/14/2012 c22 witeaya
had fun reading this.
thank god that creep aiden is finally dead.
is this the end?
had fun reading this.
thank god that creep aiden is finally dead.
is this the end?
2/19/2012 c4 rachelontheramble
Another great chapter! But I'm still undecided on how doggy Sam was acting, albeit cute and all.
Some proofing thoughts include:
Is she stuck like this can I have her?" - needs a question mark after this and c in can should be capitalized.
The boys name was Darren- apostrophe after boy and before s
creek- should be creak.
alphas name- missing apostrophe- should be alpha's
Another great chapter! But I'm still undecided on how doggy Sam was acting, albeit cute and all.
Some proofing thoughts include:
Is she stuck like this can I have her?" - needs a question mark after this and c in can should be capitalized.
The boys name was Darren- apostrophe after boy and before s
creek- should be creak.
alphas name- missing apostrophe- should be alpha's
2/19/2012 c3 rachelontheramble
Hi! Really intrigued by the premise of the story and eagerly reading on. Just one thing: Twice 'rogue' has been spelt as 'rouge' in this chapter.
Hi! Really intrigued by the premise of the story and eagerly reading on. Just one thing: Twice 'rogue' has been spelt as 'rouge' in this chapter.
9/27/2011 c22 7Novocaine for the Soul
I really enjoyed this. Sam and Marcus are very cute together. I can't wait for the sequel.
7Novocaine for the SoulI really enjoyed this. Sam and Marcus are very cute together. I can't wait for the sequel.