for Just Haven't Met You Yet4/10/2010 c1 
25Wakao
Hello!
Is this a cliche start? Yeah it is. This isn't really constructive criticism though, since cliche is not necessarily a bad thing.
It's so weird because I just read a story with a Shelley in it and she was totally s.lutty and all. Haha.
Anyway, I didn't spot any spelling/grammar errors so that's good then. Good start.
-PWB
25WakaoHello!
Is this a cliche start? Yeah it is. This isn't really constructive criticism though, since cliche is not necessarily a bad thing.
It's so weird because I just read a story with a Shelley in it and she was totally s.lutty and all. Haha.
Anyway, I didn't spot any spelling/grammar errors so that's good then. Good start.
-PWB
1/23/2010 c1 laurac559
Great start! Really liking it so far :)
Keep up the good work!
BeautifulDawn :)
Great start! Really liking it so far :)
Keep up the good work!
BeautifulDawn :)
1/11/2010 c1 41chewychester
I'm interested because he looked up while in the cafe and the mystery girl was gone. Then she found his cell phone left behind. Was she in the ladies room?
41chewychesterI'm interested because he looked up while in the cafe and the mystery girl was gone. Then she found his cell phone left behind. Was she in the ladies room?