for Just Smile and Nod8/12/2014 c12 OberynMartell
I'm ridiculously pleased to see you stand up for Alys. I love her and her shades of grey, wouldn't have it any other way. Excited to experience what comes next :)
I'm ridiculously pleased to see you stand up for Alys. I love her and her shades of grey, wouldn't have it any other way. Excited to experience what comes next :)
28/4/2014 c11 bookwurm247
I don't know why those people would ask that you change Alys. She's a new type of outcast heroine. I'm really curious about her past. Also, how is Hayden and her relationship (whatever it is) going to develop I wonder.
I don't know why those people would ask that you change Alys. She's a new type of outcast heroine. I'm really curious about her past. Also, how is Hayden and her relationship (whatever it is) going to develop I wonder.
8/4/2014 c8 bookwurm247
I want to see this side of her more (Alys).
P.S. I love her name. I should've mentioned that earlier.
I want to see this side of her more (Alys).
P.S. I love her name. I should've mentioned that earlier.
8/3/2014 c5 bookwurm247
So my guess is Alys is like this because of her mother. Where's her father? I feel so bad for Alys. But I also admire her for enduring all this time.
So my guess is Alys is like this because of her mother. Where's her father? I feel so bad for Alys. But I also admire her for enduring all this time.
8/3/2014 c3 bookwurm247
This is really good. Descriptive and lots of details. It's like a typical outcast girl looking in but much different. I really like this story. I hope you don't abandon it.
This is really good. Descriptive and lots of details. It's like a typical outcast girl looking in but much different. I really like this story. I hope you don't abandon it.
8/3/2014 c12 Shadowswept
I love the imagery you use in this chapter! My mind was doused in gasoline. I could hear his fingers tracing along the edges on my journal, like spider legs along my neck. A destructive matchstick standing in all the hundreds of papers that she's drawn. It all works together to create a tense, ominous atmosphere. Hayden comes off as cold and calculating. Yet he knows that he's screwed up. I believe that there's more hidden below the surface, and that he only told her as much as he wanted her to know. He unintentionally revealed some stronger emotion with his body language. He gripped her journal rather tightly. He also didn't want to give it back, which makes me think he was more affected by it than he let on. I do like his cold, in control persona. I'll be interested to see how this develops into a romance, because there is no hint of attraction between them so far. But the mental seduction is exciting.
I love the imagery you use in this chapter! My mind was doused in gasoline. I could hear his fingers tracing along the edges on my journal, like spider legs along my neck. A destructive matchstick standing in all the hundreds of papers that she's drawn. It all works together to create a tense, ominous atmosphere. Hayden comes off as cold and calculating. Yet he knows that he's screwed up. I believe that there's more hidden below the surface, and that he only told her as much as he wanted her to know. He unintentionally revealed some stronger emotion with his body language. He gripped her journal rather tightly. He also didn't want to give it back, which makes me think he was more affected by it than he let on. I do like his cold, in control persona. I'll be interested to see how this develops into a romance, because there is no hint of attraction between them so far. But the mental seduction is exciting.
8/3/2014 c12 Guest
Wow! Your plot is outstanding!
Wow! Your plot is outstanding!
8/3/2014 c12 Ginxy
I have to say that I have truley enjoyed reading this story. There is so much depth and rawness that it makes you question things. There is neither a heroine or hero but two people who have deep issues with themselves and with society. For those who asked you to change your character it's because they are uncomfortable, because truths are harder to face than faceless masks. Keep up the good work, though be mindfull of grammer mistakes in your chapters and your sentences. Other than that keep it coming! : )
I have to say that I have truley enjoyed reading this story. There is so much depth and rawness that it makes you question things. There is neither a heroine or hero but two people who have deep issues with themselves and with society. For those who asked you to change your character it's because they are uncomfortable, because truths are harder to face than faceless masks. Keep up the good work, though be mindfull of grammer mistakes in your chapters and your sentences. Other than that keep it coming! : )
8/3/2014 c12 ohhsnapitskatie
Holy crap, I want more! Its rare for me to find a story that completely and utterly just pushes everything out of my mind except for what I read. You had me hooked at the first chapter and I so desperately want you to finish this story. I have to know her complete back story and more of haydens. I need more! Please! I followed and favorited both the story and you.
Holy crap, I want more! Its rare for me to find a story that completely and utterly just pushes everything out of my mind except for what I read. You had me hooked at the first chapter and I so desperately want you to finish this story. I have to know her complete back story and more of haydens. I need more! Please! I followed and favorited both the story and you.
8/2/2014 c12 Samantha
Wow, it's getting serious now. Please update again very soon. I'll listen to the song.
Wow, it's getting serious now. Please update again very soon. I'll listen to the song.
8/2/2014 c12 URRRRGH
Oh my effing god... You are awesome and I love your story. Normally I avoid 'revenge' stories but I just...I love this one so much and your character depth and plot line and freaking awesomeness I'd just like to put my emotions into one word:
URRRRGH!
Oh my effing god... You are awesome and I love your story. Normally I avoid 'revenge' stories but I just...I love this one so much and your character depth and plot line and freaking awesomeness I'd just like to put my emotions into one word:
URRRRGH!