for ALIEN AMNESIAC1/31/2013 c1 Guess who
Nothing happens for a long long while, then someone whom you have never met, perhaps that you find online. Intuits that you have received through your space friends a time released implant, designed to release your full potential, and allow you to be a conduit of an advanced energy necessary for survival on the planet. At a certain age, say 65, after you have had a normal life, being a householder and raising children, The implant is activated ( make it occur around 12-21-12, and then, your life changes radically in ways you never thought possible. You become emboldened, knowing that you have mission and purpose. The aliens, knowing you were a nerd, and a sciencefiction freak unleash the visionary scientist within you, and you become new Tesla, minus the government harassment. How about that one?
Nothing happens for a long long while, then someone whom you have never met, perhaps that you find online. Intuits that you have received through your space friends a time released implant, designed to release your full potential, and allow you to be a conduit of an advanced energy necessary for survival on the planet. At a certain age, say 65, after you have had a normal life, being a householder and raising children, The implant is activated ( make it occur around 12-21-12, and then, your life changes radically in ways you never thought possible. You become emboldened, knowing that you have mission and purpose. The aliens, knowing you were a nerd, and a sciencefiction freak unleash the visionary scientist within you, and you become new Tesla, minus the government harassment. How about that one?
1/28/2010 c2 
4vixenia
Well okay this chapter definitely explains why the character didn't have a name in the first chapter. A good idea though is to try and show the characteristics of the character though. So having the doctors show what he looks like in a mirror and describing it is always a great way to represent your character. Great chappie by the way!
4vixeniaWell okay this chapter definitely explains why the character didn't have a name in the first chapter. A good idea though is to try and show the characteristics of the character though. So having the doctors show what he looks like in a mirror and describing it is always a great way to represent your character. Great chappie by the way!
1/28/2010 c1 vixenia
I really like the idea behind it. Using more visual details is always a good way to add juice and length to your story. So when the main character is waking up, try to add as much detail to his/her surroundings as possible, as well as the people. Also, its always a good idea to introduce your main characters name in the first chapter.
I really like the idea behind it. Using more visual details is always a good way to add juice and length to your story. So when the main character is waking up, try to add as much detail to his/her surroundings as possible, as well as the people. Also, its always a good idea to introduce your main characters name in the first chapter.
1/19/2010 c1 Arv
An interesting start. Could develop into something really interesting. Lack of capitalization of "i" is strange, but maybe that is related to later development of the story line...?
Keep it going. I want to see where this leads.
An interesting start. Could develop into something really interesting. Lack of capitalization of "i" is strange, but maybe that is related to later development of the story line...?
Keep it going. I want to see where this leads.