for BecomingBecame2/1/2010 c1 
8sealednectar
This was good. I liked the fast paced rhythm at the beginning. Very good. It flowed really well. I also liked your use of becoming/became. Good job.
8sealednectarThis was good. I liked the fast paced rhythm at the beginning. Very good. It flowed really well. I also liked your use of becoming/became. Good job.