4/18/2012 c24 1HungerInHerEyes
Great story :)

4/18/2012 c24 brasattva
I have been WAITING for so loong and it was so worth it! :) Thank you so much. Some parts were a little choppy, but nothing I couldn't get through. Well done!

4/17/2012 c24 2THis doesn't even exist
Jesus. Finally! :)

I saw the update in my inbox, and I was like "Holy shit!"

So I had to read it immediately!

I'm starting with the corrections:

You wrote: "Sometimes I forget that underneath it all, you are just a typical. What are your favourite classes?"

And I would like to know, a typical what?

You wrote: And if when we got back I went up to the guest room he'd gifted me and cried without entirely understanding why, well. I was OK with that.

And I think it would be better if it were worded like this: And if I went up to the guest room he'd gifted me with when we got back, and cried without entirely understanding why, well, I was OK with that.

Of course it makes sense either way, I just had to read over the original twice in order to understand what you were trying to say.

And: The he said, "Go."

I think you meant "Then he said..."

And now for the comments on specific things:

"Chris would have jizzed at the sight of"

made me laugh my ass off. I think it's wonderful that you included something so... not like Kon, but at the same time it was completely like her to say.

And when Jon picked up the guitar, I don't know why, but I feel like it would have made Kon think of Chris, don't you?

Overall, I loved it as usual. I'm so glad you've updated, but I won't put any pressure on you to give us the next chapter any sooner than you're ready ;)

I think this chapter, especially in a few specific sections, was beautifully written. Description can either make you or break you, and you're doing perfectly in my opinion.

I think overall my favorite line was: "Jon and Jess were gone now, and this vanishing of my newest mystery left a little hole in the ever-thinning fabric that held my consciousness sufficiently in the realm of sanity."

Don't ask me why, it just struck me.

I hope everything at CCA is going great for you :)

As stressed as you must be, I hope you enjoy your free time, even if it is spent sleeping.

~Chelsey

3/27/2012 c23 shann-ng
hello! this is the second time i've read this story haha :) aw you're a brilliant writer! I love how you make it flow so well, and your story line is just brilliant, the background of the characters comes across so well:) i hope to see an update soon! favourited and subscribed! hehe x

1/26/2012 c23 1wunderstrucked
I'm a new reader, and I know you asked for criticism, but unfortunately I can't offer you any at the moment. I just wanted to take the opportunity to say that you're a fabulous writer! And this story is very much fantastic. The fact that one song inspired you to write about twenty three chapters is astounding. Whoa, I've never written a review this long :P Anyway, keep writing! I'm excited for the next chapter!

12/26/2011 c23 lunabella
I've read all 23 chapters in a day, I just couldn't stop it's so good! :) I love how you take your time building Nate and Kon's relationship. It's so realistic and well done. I must admit Kon constantly crying made me a little crazy throughout the story but that's nothing compared to all the great aspects of the story. I hope you havent given up on this story and update soon :)

12/19/2011 c23 I Eat Pandas for Breakfast
Now that you have hundreds of reviews, perhaps this one more wouldn't make a difference, but do hope you'll continue this story. Rarely do I find something on fictionpress that breaks the boundaries of what has been done, but Chroma manages to do just that. Funny thing is, I've been staring at my Cartel CDs while trying to find words that convey how much this story sucked me in. Most stories where the protagonist has been abused or has a "dark past" are extremely cliched, and I initially wanted to avoid the story, but your knack for words and their arrangement and Kon's determination urged me to plow on, and I'm glad you did.

Your story isn't rushed, which is something I've always struggled with, and the dialogue is perfect. The little city of Chroma is lifelike, and is one of the few settings that truly isolated me from the tiny confines of my bedroom.

In other words, amazing.

Even if you don't continue this, this will forever be one of the more memorable and inspirational stories I've read.