for Chroma7/23/2011 c19 strangledice
Oooh, I wish Nate and Kon will talk to each other again. Oh Kon, why did you have to ask such a thing? lol.
Great chapter! I'm really looking forward to the next one.
Update soon!:)
Oooh, I wish Nate and Kon will talk to each other again. Oh Kon, why did you have to ask such a thing? lol.
Great chapter! I'm really looking forward to the next one.
Update soon!:)
7/23/2011 c19 
2XxAmberRomancexX
Thanks for the quick update. I apologize if I may have offended you with the last review...I didn't mean to imply that the chapter itself was unimportant. I am still eagerly waiting for things to pick up a bit though, and it seems like we're about there. I feel like the last few chapters have been building up to something.
I really liked the ending line. It does well at fleshing Jess out and establishing why she's so important. She seems to be an important catalyst in the lives of the people around her. I'm interested to see what else is in store for her.
Can't wait til the next chapter!
2XxAmberRomancexXThanks for the quick update. I apologize if I may have offended you with the last review...I didn't mean to imply that the chapter itself was unimportant. I am still eagerly waiting for things to pick up a bit though, and it seems like we're about there. I feel like the last few chapters have been building up to something.
I really liked the ending line. It does well at fleshing Jess out and establishing why she's so important. She seems to be an important catalyst in the lives of the people around her. I'm interested to see what else is in store for her.
Can't wait til the next chapter!
7/23/2011 c19 Sheri
Yessssss. You uploaded :D
Not a demand or anything, but we have more Brittany and Jon? :P
I like their characters. But, it's an ask, not a demand. :) Your story, your rules.
Anyway, upload again sooooooon. This story rocks. :D
Yessssss. You uploaded :D
Not a demand or anything, but we have more Brittany and Jon? :P
I like their characters. But, it's an ask, not a demand. :) Your story, your rules.
Anyway, upload again sooooooon. This story rocks. :D
7/19/2011 c18 sam
WHAT. I need more. I've just spent my entire night reading this, it is now 650 am. YOU CANT LEAVE ME HANGING. -_-
WHAT. I need more. I've just spent my entire night reading this, it is now 650 am. YOU CANT LEAVE ME HANGING. -_-
7/18/2011 c18 25Kyllex
Ahhh Nate and Kon. They are so great. I love how they are able to just sit there together, not really talking, but understanding. I love how they both have complicated pasts but it doesn't stop them from smiling. I CAN'T WAIT for things to start progressing faster between them. I know that's not the point of the story...much like Nate's first book...but still. Haha.
I'm glad you updated! I do love this story, and even though I sort of forgot about it, I was happy to read this chapter.
I hope Leslie and Jess are okay! And I hope Keaton, Leslie, and Max are able to sort things out...
Update soon? Pweese?
25KyllexAhhh Nate and Kon. They are so great. I love how they are able to just sit there together, not really talking, but understanding. I love how they both have complicated pasts but it doesn't stop them from smiling. I CAN'T WAIT for things to start progressing faster between them. I know that's not the point of the story...much like Nate's first book...but still. Haha.
I'm glad you updated! I do love this story, and even though I sort of forgot about it, I was happy to read this chapter.
I hope Leslie and Jess are okay! And I hope Keaton, Leslie, and Max are able to sort things out...
Update soon? Pweese?
7/18/2011 c18 2XxAmberRomancexX
An UPDATE! Yes! Although, as excited as I am, I feel like I'm going to have to be a bit of a jerk and say this...wasn't quite enough. I mean, save for the last few bits, this chapter seemed like more filler. But whatever. Its an update! I'm not chewing on much in this one, but I will eagerly await the next chapter as always. :)
2XxAmberRomancexXAn UPDATE! Yes! Although, as excited as I am, I feel like I'm going to have to be a bit of a jerk and say this...wasn't quite enough. I mean, save for the last few bits, this chapter seemed like more filler. But whatever. Its an update! I'm not chewing on much in this one, but I will eagerly await the next chapter as always. :)
7/18/2011 c18 emmasaurus
I absolutely love this. It's a refreshing, albeit sad, story to read amongst the heaps of stories on FictionPress. I love Kon's personality and how she seems to click sowell with Nate. And as much as I adore the memories with Chris, I'm glad they are just memories. He wasn't good for her, and I hope she realizes that soon. I mean, I think she hasalwayd known that Chris wasn't ever any good for her, but she needs someone like Nate toreallybring outthat realization. Also, I lovelovelove Max and Keaton. So Leslie needs to get over it. ;D but don't kill her off or anything because that's just too much sadness. Also, Nate's dad is a dick. I hope you're nit planning on bringing him in a whole lot more cause I don't like him one bit. So that's my lame sorta massive review since it is one thirty in the morning and I've been reading this for the past two hours. Thanks for the excellent read and I hope you can update pretty soon! (:
I absolutely love this. It's a refreshing, albeit sad, story to read amongst the heaps of stories on FictionPress. I love Kon's personality and how she seems to click sowell with Nate. And as much as I adore the memories with Chris, I'm glad they are just memories. He wasn't good for her, and I hope she realizes that soon. I mean, I think she hasalwayd known that Chris wasn't ever any good for her, but she needs someone like Nate toreallybring outthat realization. Also, I lovelovelove Max and Keaton. So Leslie needs to get over it. ;D but don't kill her off or anything because that's just too much sadness. Also, Nate's dad is a dick. I hope you're nit planning on bringing him in a whole lot more cause I don't like him one bit. So that's my lame sorta massive review since it is one thirty in the morning and I've been reading this for the past two hours. Thanks for the excellent read and I hope you can update pretty soon! (:
7/16/2011 c18 3hometownherox
cjbdvkjadbvldjvblk I've been checking this story everyday since you left on chapter 17. This was worth the wait but you made it a cliff hanger, or lets say a roof hanger. I love your writing, still, please update soon!
3hometownheroxcjbdvkjadbvldjvblk I've been checking this story everyday since you left on chapter 17. This was worth the wait but you made it a cliff hanger, or lets say a roof hanger. I love your writing, still, please update soon!
7/16/2011 c18 7WindLessNiteZ
! That cliffhanger shouldn't have existed T.T .
Oh well ~ this chapter was definitely worth the wait , I am glad that Nate and Kon is finally making some progress so is Leslie, Max and Keaton (although their one seem a lot worse ) XD
-Thx for the update and update soonnnnnnnnnnnnnnn ;)
7WindLessNiteZ! That cliffhanger shouldn't have existed T.T .
Oh well ~ this chapter was definitely worth the wait , I am glad that Nate and Kon is finally making some progress so is Leslie, Max and Keaton (although their one seem a lot worse ) XD
-Thx for the update and update soonnnnnnnnnnnnnnn ;)
7/16/2011 c18 rachel-rob-sandwich
i love this story, when i found it i just started reading and i got so entranced i just had to keep going, if this was a real book i'm sure heaps of people would buy and read it. It captures everything...
I hope to read more soon. Your a great author...
:)
i love this story, when i found it i just started reading and i got so entranced i just had to keep going, if this was a real book i'm sure heaps of people would buy and read it. It captures everything...
I hope to read more soon. Your a great author...
:)
7/16/2011 c18 2Sierra507
I'm so glad that Kon and Nate r finding sort of a comfort in one another. And that she's actually talking!
The cycle thing? Brilliant honestly.
That's how it is actually. People who suffer through something think that they'd never do the same to another person but most probably they would. Like u said, it's what they know. I actually feel sorry for Kon's mum, even though she was psycho and no one should treat their kid that way.
SHIT! Drama between Leslie, Max and Keaton?
FIFTH grade? How can Max be this oblivious? Hello, best friendss?
God, i hope nothing happens to either of them. Especially not Jessica.
Action packed chapter, expecting another soon! (: good work!
2Sierra507I'm so glad that Kon and Nate r finding sort of a comfort in one another. And that she's actually talking!
The cycle thing? Brilliant honestly.
That's how it is actually. People who suffer through something think that they'd never do the same to another person but most probably they would. Like u said, it's what they know. I actually feel sorry for Kon's mum, even though she was psycho and no one should treat their kid that way.
SHIT! Drama between Leslie, Max and Keaton?
FIFTH grade? How can Max be this oblivious? Hello, best friendss?
God, i hope nothing happens to either of them. Especially not Jessica.
Action packed chapter, expecting another soon! (: good work!
7/16/2011 c18 9rukz
hope they'll be quicker updates.
I found the conversations lacking, as in their were only 2-3 phrases when their was a conversation with someone.
liked it, just didn't think it was your best chapter.
9rukzhope they'll be quicker updates.
I found the conversations lacking, as in their were only 2-3 phrases when their was a conversation with someone.
liked it, just didn't think it was your best chapter.
7/16/2011 c18 7Fedorachild
Maah..why must you be such an amazing writer? I can't stop reading all of the chapters..I like how Konstantine is asking him more questions. She seems to be more confident, which is good for her :)
I liked this one (as usual). And it's completely you to stop on a cliff hanger. :P
When do you think you'll update again?
7FedorachildMaah..why must you be such an amazing writer? I can't stop reading all of the chapters..I like how Konstantine is asking him more questions. She seems to be more confident, which is good for her :)
I liked this one (as usual). And it's completely you to stop on a cliff hanger. :P
When do you think you'll update again?
7/16/2011 c18 2THis doesn't even exist
Oh Jesus I love you.
You know what's cool? My birthday was Tuesday. So I consider this a belated present.
So does actually living in SoCal make you want to write it any differently? I stayed on the wharf on June 26th and thought of you :)
The third ‘paragraph’, or whatever is one of the reasons I love you. You can describe something so well in the middle of a scene without making it seem like you were writing, and then thought ‘oh crap, what does this place look like? Oh well, I’ll just describe it here’.
“Apparently he had realised that I'd been messing with him throughout our entire conversation. I knew exactly what the book was about.” Two Things . 1) you misspelled Realized, and 2) I would make it more clear earlier that she was doing it on purpose. Maybe I missed something, but I didn’t see that.
“I sat on the end of my bed for the week,” made it sound like she sat on the end of her bed… for an entire week. Not that she sat on the end of the bed… the one that will be hers for a week.
I wish I could read while in the car… It makes me feel nauseous though.
“Nate and I left early to go back to his and sit on the rooftop” I think there is supposed to be something between ‘his’ and ‘and’.
Here are my favorite parts:
I could see the town getting smaller and smaller, and I'd been thinking that this must be what it feels like to be free.
-Perfect Line
He shut the door behind him and slid to sit cross legged with his back against it. He didn't speak and neither did I, and the silence may very well have been tangible if either of us had cared to test it. But we didn't, choosing instead to watch the stars and each other
-I understand, and couldn’t describe it any better.
I wondered if my mother ever expected to die that way. If, as a child, when her father came into her room night after night and told her that if she loved him, she'd do what he asked, I wonder if she imagined that one day, she'd escape. That she would be better than he was. I wondered how much she hated herself when she abused me all those years later. I wondered if she even knew that she was repeating the pattern, or if all sense of morality and normality and love got shot to hell after all those years of track marks and stupors and all the times she let men rape her because she thought she loved them and that's what her childhood taught her the definition of love was.
-This part was very powerful.
Okay. Well, that’s it I think. Sorry, I’m sleep deprived.
Love you,
~Chelsey
2THis doesn't even existOh Jesus I love you.
You know what's cool? My birthday was Tuesday. So I consider this a belated present.
So does actually living in SoCal make you want to write it any differently? I stayed on the wharf on June 26th and thought of you :)
The third ‘paragraph’, or whatever is one of the reasons I love you. You can describe something so well in the middle of a scene without making it seem like you were writing, and then thought ‘oh crap, what does this place look like? Oh well, I’ll just describe it here’.
“Apparently he had realised that I'd been messing with him throughout our entire conversation. I knew exactly what the book was about.” Two Things . 1) you misspelled Realized, and 2) I would make it more clear earlier that she was doing it on purpose. Maybe I missed something, but I didn’t see that.
“I sat on the end of my bed for the week,” made it sound like she sat on the end of her bed… for an entire week. Not that she sat on the end of the bed… the one that will be hers for a week.
I wish I could read while in the car… It makes me feel nauseous though.
“Nate and I left early to go back to his and sit on the rooftop” I think there is supposed to be something between ‘his’ and ‘and’.
Here are my favorite parts:
I could see the town getting smaller and smaller, and I'd been thinking that this must be what it feels like to be free.
-Perfect Line
He shut the door behind him and slid to sit cross legged with his back against it. He didn't speak and neither did I, and the silence may very well have been tangible if either of us had cared to test it. But we didn't, choosing instead to watch the stars and each other
-I understand, and couldn’t describe it any better.
I wondered if my mother ever expected to die that way. If, as a child, when her father came into her room night after night and told her that if she loved him, she'd do what he asked, I wonder if she imagined that one day, she'd escape. That she would be better than he was. I wondered how much she hated herself when she abused me all those years later. I wondered if she even knew that she was repeating the pattern, or if all sense of morality and normality and love got shot to hell after all those years of track marks and stupors and all the times she let men rape her because she thought she loved them and that's what her childhood taught her the definition of love was.
-This part was very powerful.
Okay. Well, that’s it I think. Sorry, I’m sleep deprived.
Love you,
~Chelsey