for Chroma1/23/2010 c2 
13Shadowhound
I got to admit, I'm interested. It's also been a while since I read anything on FP because I'd thought it gone to shit. Thank you for reminding me there are still raw diamonds in the rough, and that this is where you learn how to cut the impurities away. And I think that's as far as I can take that metaphor.
The one thing that sticks out to me is the characters name. Mainly because I've never heard of anyone named Konstantine, it just seems a bit funky to me. I'm don't think it's going to ruin your story in my mind, but...funky.
That said, I do like the start of this. I hope you continue to do flashbacks like you did at the start of this chapter to flesh out Chris and Konstantine's relationship.
I read the prologue, too, and it seems kind of redundant and unnecessary. I'd rather you show us how their relationship evolves in flashbacks than just jumble it all together in the prologue. What you have there seems like it would be great for the description of the story, but not so much as a part of the story.
One last thing that sprung to my mind, the tone of this story reminds me of Perks of Being a Wallflower.
Looking forward to reading more,
Shadowhound
13ShadowhoundI got to admit, I'm interested. It's also been a while since I read anything on FP because I'd thought it gone to shit. Thank you for reminding me there are still raw diamonds in the rough, and that this is where you learn how to cut the impurities away. And I think that's as far as I can take that metaphor.
The one thing that sticks out to me is the characters name. Mainly because I've never heard of anyone named Konstantine, it just seems a bit funky to me. I'm don't think it's going to ruin your story in my mind, but...funky.
That said, I do like the start of this. I hope you continue to do flashbacks like you did at the start of this chapter to flesh out Chris and Konstantine's relationship.
I read the prologue, too, and it seems kind of redundant and unnecessary. I'd rather you show us how their relationship evolves in flashbacks than just jumble it all together in the prologue. What you have there seems like it would be great for the description of the story, but not so much as a part of the story.
One last thing that sprung to my mind, the tone of this story reminds me of Perks of Being a Wallflower.
Looking forward to reading more,
Shadowhound
1/23/2010 c2 2THis doesn't even exist
It's been so long I pretty much forgot all the details.
I'm not sure how close this is to the version that I got, but for some reason, I got more from reading it this time than the first.
I really like it, still, and can't wait to read what I haven't already seen :)
~Chelsey
2THis doesn't even existIt's been so long I pretty much forgot all the details.
I'm not sure how close this is to the version that I got, but for some reason, I got more from reading it this time than the first.
I really like it, still, and can't wait to read what I haven't already seen :)
~Chelsey
1/21/2010 c1 12elisefey
I clicked on this because I love the song, "Constantine", you were inspired by, which is why I'm not surprised that just the prologue promises a tragic story.
12elisefeyI clicked on this because I love the song, "Constantine", you were inspired by, which is why I'm not surprised that just the prologue promises a tragic story.
1/21/2010 c1 2THis doesn't even exist
I'm so excited! Sad I couldn't Beta this, but you know... school sucks. Anyway, I can't wait to read the rest of this.
~Chelsey
2THis doesn't even existI'm so excited! Sad I couldn't Beta this, but you know... school sucks. Anyway, I can't wait to read the rest of this.
~Chelsey