4/8/2011 c4 TheIronPanda
I like it if you ever decided to update I'll read more :)

1/25/2010 c1 23Damien Vlashtov
Quick review, I enjoyed your piece and will give you some things that I think ( in my extreme arrogance ) could improve the piece. now "only, simply, etc" a (useless?) remnant of his previous life. "also" is odd in this context, doesn't really work for me. "The only part of his former life was gone from the universe" is somewhat awkward, I would change "the only part" to something like the "last remnant" ( to be redundant ) or last physical reminder, etc. Reworking the sentence could make the paragraph more powerful as a whole. It is an interesting piece, sorry that I don't have the time to give a thorough review. I assume you'll write more, as it doesn't seem to have a powerful ending. One quick piece of advice is to "show, not tell". An example of where you "tell"-"his former heavenly home". This makes the piece rather clear, but perhaps too obvious. It may take keep the piece from acquiring a mystical feeling. Regardless, it is a decent piece and I am sure with some editing you can make it quite powerful. Props for your writing, and for having an awesome name.

1/25/2010 c2 thisdizzydreamer
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