for Castaway11/10/2012 c1 
11iAmTheTot
I like this. In particular, I had no problem imagining the scenario. I could see myself in this situation with every line, a new detail added. Very cool stuff. My only gripe is that I feel the rhythm on the line "Although I'm restless, I try to lie still" runs a little bit too long. Before and after that line, I read the poem very smoothly.
11iAmTheTotI like this. In particular, I had no problem imagining the scenario. I could see myself in this situation with every line, a new detail added. Very cool stuff. My only gripe is that I feel the rhythm on the line "Although I'm restless, I try to lie still" runs a little bit too long. Before and after that line, I read the poem very smoothly.
8/13/2011 c1 4Night Liker
All the small details in the beginning allow a glimpse into the castaway's world and make it seem very authentic.
I love the way it ends. So very uncertain (as I think it should be)
Thanks for sharing
~N. Liker
4Night LikerAll the small details in the beginning allow a glimpse into the castaway's world and make it seem very authentic.
I love the way it ends. So very uncertain (as I think it should be)
Thanks for sharing
~N. Liker