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11/10/2012 c1 11iAmTheTot
I like this. In particular, I had no problem imagining the scenario. I could see myself in this situation with every line, a new detail added. Very cool stuff. My only gripe is that I feel the rhythm on the line "Although I'm restless, I try to lie still" runs a little bit too long. Before and after that line, I read the poem very smoothly.
8/13/2011 c1 4Night Liker
All the small details in the beginning allow a glimpse into the castaway's world and make it seem very authentic.

I love the way it ends. So very uncertain (as I think it should be)

Thanks for sharing

~N. Liker
3/4/2010 c1 30Kriss-C
This one was really good... I don't have your email address to write you...
2/7/2010 c1 18Written In Stone
a perfect description of being an actual castaway. i love it!

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