for Foolish Games11/17/2012 c4 
1leavesfallingup
I like how you use the metaphor of a song that won't leave your head to describe Abby. It fits well.
I hope that you don't mind, but I spotted three typos:
"he saw a very family figure" should be "familiar"
"It was like a talent he could on bestow upon her" perhaps the word "on" after "could" doesn't belong? Not sure on that one.
Finally, "earphones back in and started to job" should be "jog"
1leavesfallingupI like how you use the metaphor of a song that won't leave your head to describe Abby. It fits well.
I hope that you don't mind, but I spotted three typos:
"he saw a very family figure" should be "familiar"
"It was like a talent he could on bestow upon her" perhaps the word "on" after "could" doesn't belong? Not sure on that one.
Finally, "earphones back in and started to job" should be "jog"
8/29/2012 c17 The Quotidian Life
Very interesting story. I was intrigued throughout the entire book. Will you be writing a sequel for this?
I really enjoyed reading this
Cheers,
TQL
Very interesting story. I was intrigued throughout the entire book. Will you be writing a sequel for this?
I really enjoyed reading this
Cheers,
TQL
8/28/2012 c3 The Quotidian Life
Hey,
I'm really loving this story! It reads really well.
I also just realised that Abby and Jethro are both characters from NCIS! And I'm guessing that this is a coincidence. I live watching NCIS, do you?
Cheers,
TQL
Hey,
I'm really loving this story! It reads really well.
I also just realised that Abby and Jethro are both characters from NCIS! And I'm guessing that this is a coincidence. I live watching NCIS, do you?
Cheers,
TQL
8/9/2012 c17 1Montara
Their choice of staying together is not easy...people will talk behind their backs...the age difference, the way he ended things with Victoria (I think he made a big mistake there...he shouldn't humiliate Victoria like that!).
I hope their love is strong enough to go through all that together. They're lucky their families are happy that they are together...
It was an interesting journey. Thank you!
1MontaraTheir choice of staying together is not easy...people will talk behind their backs...the age difference, the way he ended things with Victoria (I think he made a big mistake there...he shouldn't humiliate Victoria like that!).
I hope their love is strong enough to go through all that together. They're lucky their families are happy that they are together...
It was an interesting journey. Thank you!
11/30/2011 c17 use.less.woman
LOVE this one! I guess because I am actually 27 I dont find the age difference to be a bad thing. But I might feel different if I were 15 and thinking about a 46 year old man. I just happen to think there are many wonderful advantages to older men.
The main characters in this story were much more unique than the others. Of course she liked the Soup but I think you did a great job of adding new elements to this character.
I really liked it. Great Job!
LOVE this one! I guess because I am actually 27 I dont find the age difference to be a bad thing. But I might feel different if I were 15 and thinking about a 46 year old man. I just happen to think there are many wonderful advantages to older men.
The main characters in this story were much more unique than the others. Of course she liked the Soup but I think you did a great job of adding new elements to this character.
I really liked it. Great Job!
11/26/2011 c12 Krullie
Hi LFF I have a question is Jethro 41 of 46? becouse in the prologe you said he was 41 and now he is 46? Im kinda confused? I dont really care about age. but it is a bit to much.. he is almost fifty and she is twenty, she is my age! The forty one is better compared to the forty six. But hey it is your party so you discise. so what is his real age?
lots of love,
Hi LFF I have a question is Jethro 41 of 46? becouse in the prologe you said he was 41 and now he is 46? Im kinda confused? I dont really care about age. but it is a bit to much.. he is almost fifty and she is twenty, she is my age! The forty one is better compared to the forty six. But hey it is your party so you discise. so what is his real age?
lots of love,
7/8/2011 c17 lady of the taj
I didn't really like the ending. I felt like the epilogut could have been a regular chapter. I don't know what happened with victoria, what they did that day, or how the rest of their life was. I feel like that's what an epilogue is supposed to do. Tie up loose ends, and tell readers how the rest of the character's life went. A sequel would be helpful.
I didn't really like the ending. I felt like the epilogut could have been a regular chapter. I don't know what happened with victoria, what they did that day, or how the rest of their life was. I feel like that's what an epilogue is supposed to do. Tie up loose ends, and tell readers how the rest of the character's life went. A sequel would be helpful.
7/5/2011 c17 15Ice Bubble
It would be funny, though improbable if Victoria walked in on them.
LOVE THIS!
15Ice BubbleIt would be funny, though improbable if Victoria walked in on them.
LOVE THIS!
7/5/2011 c11 Ice Bubble
This is a very skillful way to end the love. I'm getting more and more impressed by your gift every day. :)
This is a very skillful way to end the love. I'm getting more and more impressed by your gift every day. :)
7/5/2011 c10 Ice Bubble
This was clearly a thinking chapter. :)
In chapter 5. Four, did you purposefully do the symbolical approach to Jethro smoking?
This was clearly a thinking chapter. :)
In chapter 5. Four, did you purposefully do the symbolical approach to Jethro smoking?