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1/2/2012 c1 287Archia
I like how to me it appeared as one long description instead of short little parts. The last line ties it all up together which is really good.
12/29/2010 c1 1StoryMonster
Skilled, select poetry and very good usage of words!

I like it.

It's really sweet too, I liked the line 'Some are covered by the sky's frosty tears...'

Maybe you could twiddle with the last line a bit? Make it slightly more enigmatic? Because the rest of the poem is great.

Keep writing!
11/27/2010 c1 4What Happens Now
There is one thing I dont understand the beginning , "Despite using white cotton as nature's tissue," is white cotton below the tree? I think it has the nice serene feeling you were trying to accomplish, though I wish you had put a few more words in, I'm not poem buff so maybe this was a haiku of sorts but it was nice in my eyes

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