for We Wait for Spring1/2/2012 c1 
287Archia
I like how to me it appeared as one long description instead of short little parts. The last line ties it all up together which is really good.
287ArchiaI like how to me it appeared as one long description instead of short little parts. The last line ties it all up together which is really good.
12/29/2010 c1 1StoryMonster
Skilled, select poetry and very good usage of words!
I like it.
It's really sweet too, I liked the line 'Some are covered by the sky's frosty tears...'
Maybe you could twiddle with the last line a bit? Make it slightly more enigmatic? Because the rest of the poem is great.
Keep writing!
1StoryMonsterSkilled, select poetry and very good usage of words!
I like it.
It's really sweet too, I liked the line 'Some are covered by the sky's frosty tears...'
Maybe you could twiddle with the last line a bit? Make it slightly more enigmatic? Because the rest of the poem is great.
Keep writing!
11/27/2010 c1 4What Happens Now
There is one thing I dont understand the beginning , "Despite using white cotton as nature's tissue," is white cotton below the tree? I think it has the nice serene feeling you were trying to accomplish, though I wish you had put a few more words in, I'm not poem buff so maybe this was a haiku of sorts but it was nice in my eyes
4What Happens NowThere is one thing I dont understand the beginning , "Despite using white cotton as nature's tissue," is white cotton below the tree? I think it has the nice serene feeling you were trying to accomplish, though I wish you had put a few more words in, I'm not poem buff so maybe this was a haiku of sorts but it was nice in my eyes