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6/27/2010 c1 5CuriousContradiction
Really interesting, especially the line breaks. Overall though, you have some really descriptive and original lines in this. I liked the twist at the end too. :)

It did seem almost... list-y, if that makes sense. I think the capitalization at the beginning of every line and general lack of punctuation contributed to it, but hey, that's just a personal stylistic preference.

Again, nice work and great descriptions. (:
5/27/2010 c1 4HighOnBrokenWings
Very very pretty. The beginning and ending fall into themselves, the first word contradicting the last line, making it almost seem as if it's alright to cry and get it all out to the point that you're okay afterwards...or something like that :D

Anyhoodle, really pretty writing.
5/1/2010 c1 4firefly114
I love both the way you started and ended this. It was very emotional, and you really got the message across! Excellent job.

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