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2/15/2010 c1 20lifeisawesome
Hm. This is music-ish like the other one. This one is different though. Definately less crazy. Harder to describe. It's not that I dont like it, but it didn't instill any strong emotion in me. The part about hurting also felt out of place, and it feels forced. However, it's nice to see you writing again, so I'm a little happy to read another one of your poems after so long.
2/15/2010 c1 7Happy to be Mad
A little too repetitive for my taste...I think it would have been better if you had you used some stong lines that really stood out. I think the idea is nice, but there is room for improvement.

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