for An Inevitable Love3/29/2013 c4 Guest
So Janice is pregnant and her father is pregnant?
So Janice is pregnant and her father is pregnant?
10/21/2012 c21 missyb1988
I enjoyed this it was cliche but I don't mind it there best stories to me haha! I got a major teen vibe when reading this I thought it could of been written better more mature even though the character were young but anyway it was still a good read
I enjoyed this it was cliche but I don't mind it there best stories to me haha! I got a major teen vibe when reading this I thought it could of been written better more mature even though the character were young but anyway it was still a good read
4/12/2011 c2 pterodactylion
hmm it's an ok- story, but you REALLY need to correct your grammar and spelling. it just doesn't flow through well enough, because i'm always stopping to mentally correct you!
if you'd like, i could edit your whole story (just the grammar & spelling, nothing else). pm me if you'd like me to (:
hmm it's an ok- story, but you REALLY need to correct your grammar and spelling. it just doesn't flow through well enough, because i'm always stopping to mentally correct you!
if you'd like, i could edit your whole story (just the grammar & spelling, nothing else). pm me if you'd like me to (:
1/7/2011 c22 Rosedreamer101
(: This was a great story ! i absolutely love it ! I can't wait untill you become an author ! I'd totally buy your books (: Just saying.
(: This was a great story ! i absolutely love it ! I can't wait untill you become an author ! I'd totally buy your books (: Just saying.
1/7/2011 c16 Rosedreamer101
Haha that part about miley cyrus, so ironic xD you have Jimmi being played by miley cyru :D
Haha that part about miley cyrus, so ironic xD you have Jimmi being played by miley cyru :D
10/3/2010 c1 MyNameIs-Madison
Even though its already complete I am going to write a review .
:D
Anyways .
Really like the Prologue .
Short and Sweet .
The whole little kids kissing is just odd to me .
reminds me of my friends neighbor .
My friend was telling me that his 6 year old neighbor has a girlfriend , and that they were outside .
The little boy kissed his girlfriend and then the were kissing .
My friend said this will scar him forever and that it was just wrong watching but he couldn't stop .
Now what happened next is going to make your jaw drop .
The little boy breaks away from the little girl , takes her hands and shoves it down his pants . Then the girl smiled and started to move her hand and-yeah I think you get it .
MY friend was grossed out .
lol.
Anyways ,
Good Job .
Even though its already complete I am going to write a review .
:D
Anyways .
Really like the Prologue .
Short and Sweet .
The whole little kids kissing is just odd to me .
reminds me of my friends neighbor .
My friend was telling me that his 6 year old neighbor has a girlfriend , and that they were outside .
The little boy kissed his girlfriend and then the were kissing .
My friend said this will scar him forever and that it was just wrong watching but he couldn't stop .
Now what happened next is going to make your jaw drop .
The little boy breaks away from the little girl , takes her hands and shoves it down his pants . Then the girl smiled and started to move her hand and-yeah I think you get it .
MY friend was grossed out .
lol.
Anyways ,
Good Job .
9/11/2010 c22 
1Christina Elizabeth
As a writer I think you need to learn to put more detail and not feel like your characters have to always be talking. It would help if we could get in her head everyone in awhile. I know your story is done but, thought might still help to hear it.
1Christina ElizabethAs a writer I think you need to learn to put more detail and not feel like your characters have to always be talking. It would help if we could get in her head everyone in awhile. I know your story is done but, thought might still help to hear it.
9/4/2010 c5 Vita
Sorry, but the "uh"s and "um"s annoy me like hell.
Sorry, but the "uh"s and "um"s annoy me like hell.
8/16/2010 c7 up and rising author
Oh my gosh! Ive been looking for a website like piczo for so long. Awesome chappie btw.
Oh my gosh! Ive been looking for a website like piczo for so long. Awesome chappie btw.
8/16/2010 c5 Lena
I've been reading your series, "An Inevitable Love" and I have to say that the story idea is pretty good, but I don't think I can continue reading it. The dialect is poor, and makes me think that you are a 14 year old girl. The main character is moody and ignorant and in general an un likable girl. Plus so far as I have seen there is no, and will be no, character development. If she were to start out insolent and angry, at least have her grow and realize that she is being a preppy spoiled child. Anyways, I dont much care for you're writing style, but I think it could be greatly improved if you wrote a bit more maturely.
I've been reading your series, "An Inevitable Love" and I have to say that the story idea is pretty good, but I don't think I can continue reading it. The dialect is poor, and makes me think that you are a 14 year old girl. The main character is moody and ignorant and in general an un likable girl. Plus so far as I have seen there is no, and will be no, character development. If she were to start out insolent and angry, at least have her grow and realize that she is being a preppy spoiled child. Anyways, I dont much care for you're writing style, but I think it could be greatly improved if you wrote a bit more maturely.
8/13/2010 c22 Da-zGreen
Love the epilouge. And I can't believed that Jimmi got pregnant. Yeah. Little Lizzie. lol. I read We Are Broken before I came back and read the epilouge. lol. Anyways, can't wait to see how Lucas and Ashlyn's relationship turns out like.
Love the epilouge. And I can't believed that Jimmi got pregnant. Yeah. Little Lizzie. lol. I read We Are Broken before I came back and read the epilouge. lol. Anyways, can't wait to see how Lucas and Ashlyn's relationship turns out like.
8/12/2010 c22 2book-geek
I really liked the way u ended this story. It was short sweet and no drama which is what I think is good for an epilouge if ur going to start a new story using other characters because it doesn't leave us wondering what happened to them while reading the new story.
I can't wait for We Are Broken :)
2book-geekI really liked the way u ended this story. It was short sweet and no drama which is what I think is good for an epilouge if ur going to start a new story using other characters because it doesn't leave us wondering what happened to them while reading the new story.
I can't wait for We Are Broken :)
8/11/2010 c22 LWTF Awards
Sorry I'm under the LWTF account. - Jimmi
I didn't feel like logging out :p
Anywho.
I loved it and I can't wait for We are Broken !
201st reviewer! Yay? I don't even think that st is supposed to be at the end of that. )
Love ya.
Sorry I'm under the LWTF account. - Jimmi
I didn't feel like logging out :p
Anywho.
I loved it and I can't wait for We are Broken !
201st reviewer! Yay? I don't even think that st is supposed to be at the end of that. )
Love ya.
8/2/2010 c21 Da-zGreen
OMG! What an awesome story! You know what, maybe Jimmi should get pregnant. hehehe But I just pitching in. lol. Thanks for the fun. Can't wait to read your other stories!
OMG! What an awesome story! You know what, maybe Jimmi should get pregnant. hehehe But I just pitching in. lol. Thanks for the fun. Can't wait to read your other stories!