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2/18/2010 c1 5charliej
Welcome back! Glad to see another story by you. This is intriguing, but very sad. Your heart just breaks for him. I'm curious about Sawyer - she could be having first day jitters or...? Looking forward to more!
2/18/2010 c1 Scrifa
I actually really love it so far, please keep posting ;D
2/18/2010 c1 1ThereAfter
Well, I'm certainly interested, not to mention excited. Ever since I finished reading "Thoughtless", I've been hoping you'd post this story. I read the summary on your profile and was definitely intrigued, so needless to say I'm pumped for it to be up.

I love angst (I'm not sure if I told you that in my review for "Thoughtless", plus I'm not sure if you remember who I am even if I did. I suggested "Between You and I" if that's the case.) and this story promises to be full of it.

I like the characters so far. Lucas seems like a good guy in a really tough spot, and Sawyer, though we didn't see much of her, peaked my interest to say the least. I love the whole vibe you've got going on, what with the small town, rash judgements, loving mother, and trying-but-coming-very-close-to-failing tough guy.

On a grammatical note. I'm almost positive, and feel free to correct me if I'm wrong, that when someone is being addressed a comma should seperate their name from the rest of the sentence. For instance, it should be "Hi, Lacey." rather than "Hi Lacey." Like I said I'm almost positive (in fact, the more I sit here thinking about it the more I remember some grammar lessons back in sophomore year, which I admittedly should've paid more attention to that confirm I'm right), so I figured I'd let you know. Either way, it really isn't that big a deal.

So, in conclusion (which that teacher sophomore year told me to never use), I'm really looking forward to reading this story. And I have every intention of reviewing every chapter. Although, those reviews probably won't be this long every time. I can't wait for your next update.
2/18/2010 c1 ForeverWasteAway
Oh, I've been waiting for this ever since I saw the summary on your profile. I am definitely already hooked. I can see why you're in love with the characters. It's only one chapter in, and I'm already pretty attached, lol.

Please update soon, I can't wait to read more! :)
2/18/2010 c1 2Amburlyn Senay
Oh, wow. That whole chapter was amazing. The emotion Lucas expresses is so real and captivating. You just need to post more. You put so much detail in your stories, they're phenomenal.

I read "Thoughtless" and this is already living up to the standard of great writing you have put for yourself. I really cannot wait to read more.


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