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6/13/2011 c1 9Callie McRea
Katie do we get this or not?

God i just fell in love with you!

This is my life!

..hmmnn can yo anonymously email someone?
2/23/2010 c1 Mneme's Requiem
Okay, first off, I really like the rhyming style here. It flows so well when you read it aloud, and is just awesome. Next, I also like the overall mood this poem gives off; albeit it's a bit sad, but still nice. Happy endings get dull after a while, anyways. One part, though, I thought seemed a bit off was the line near the end, "And your life will become a rather deep hole." It just sounded a little odd, the rhyme scheme and all. I don't know, maybe it's just me!11 I kind of had the same problem with the fourth line, "Open the window, feel the gale." I like the repitition there, with the 'open the window', I really do, but the rhyme seems a tad bit forced. Anyways, I really don't see what else to comment on here...So I'll just wrap up with saying I really like it! :)

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