for Can't Be Friends6/27/2022 c1 knockmeoffmyfeet
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4/5/2022 c10 Sandy
found this story recently and immediately was captured by it! the story itself is pretty interesting (if not a little controversial as well) but you did such a good job at telling it, especially because this must be an actual issue some people go through in life. but yeah you did really awesome at telling it, and you kinda can't help but cheer for them so i really hope they get a happy ending haha. can't wait for the next chapter!
found this story recently and immediately was captured by it! the story itself is pretty interesting (if not a little controversial as well) but you did such a good job at telling it, especially because this must be an actual issue some people go through in life. but yeah you did really awesome at telling it, and you kinda can't help but cheer for them so i really hope they get a happy ending haha. can't wait for the next chapter!
12/30/2021 c9 kiara jasmine
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11/12/2016 c8 Taint.Revile.Elude
Damn, I'm so into this now and there's no more... America is so screwed, I'm frightened, too.
Damn, I'm so into this now and there's no more... America is so screwed, I'm frightened, too.
11/11/2016 c3 Taint.Revile.Elude
Derek gets more disgusting with every chapter. The make-out session nearly made me puke. Their casual way of speaking about people who aren't bothering them kills me. But it's supposed to, lol, still. Frustrating, people believe this, these people exist. Maybe that's why I read about aliens so often, they haven't beamed down and that makes things...bearable. This is something else. Derek needs to see a therapist for his Daddy issues and stop being a follower.
Weed! Yes, Jessica. Weed is the answer, that was my mindset for a while...still is basically but yoga, tea and meditation have a place as well now. The way her Mother treats her is infuriating, especially since there has been no explanation for it as of yet. I'm thinking she's an alcoholic, that'd make sense. Doesn't excuse her being a horrible person, it amplifies it, making Jessica's life messy. However, the way she's treating her Father is bogus.
Derek gets more disgusting with every chapter. The make-out session nearly made me puke. Their casual way of speaking about people who aren't bothering them kills me. But it's supposed to, lol, still. Frustrating, people believe this, these people exist. Maybe that's why I read about aliens so often, they haven't beamed down and that makes things...bearable. This is something else. Derek needs to see a therapist for his Daddy issues and stop being a follower.
Weed! Yes, Jessica. Weed is the answer, that was my mindset for a while...still is basically but yoga, tea and meditation have a place as well now. The way her Mother treats her is infuriating, especially since there has been no explanation for it as of yet. I'm thinking she's an alcoholic, that'd make sense. Doesn't excuse her being a horrible person, it amplifies it, making Jessica's life messy. However, the way she's treating her Father is bogus.
11/11/2016 c2 Taint.Revile.Elude
Well, her Mother's a one-woman horror show. Staying with her father would've been better, step-mom or no step-mom, built in step-sibling or not. The Mom has major issues, Derek-like issues... could explain why Jessica is eventually attracted him.
Well, her Mother's a one-woman horror show. Staying with her father would've been better, step-mom or no step-mom, built in step-sibling or not. The Mom has major issues, Derek-like issues... could explain why Jessica is eventually attracted him.
11/22/2014 c1 238472398749823714892342
Wow... this an absolutely intriguing concept. I've never heard anything like it, especially not here on Fictionpress. This is so far very realistically written, I'm stoked to read the rest. Nice job!
Wow... this an absolutely intriguing concept. I've never heard anything like it, especially not here on Fictionpress. This is so far very realistically written, I'm stoked to read the rest. Nice job!
2/11/2014 c6 Monique
Aw man thanks that meant a lot & I really liked this chapter!
Aw man thanks that meant a lot & I really liked this chapter!
12/31/2013 c6 Abbey
This is such an intriguing concept. I like the pacing and the interactions among the characters. I've never really met someone with such extreme views, but this seems realistic enough. Jessica is definitely my favorite. I'd love to see how Jessica and Derek's relationship develops.
I'm a new reader, btw...
This is such an intriguing concept. I like the pacing and the interactions among the characters. I've never really met someone with such extreme views, but this seems realistic enough. Jessica is definitely my favorite. I'd love to see how Jessica and Derek's relationship develops.
I'm a new reader, btw...
12/31/2013 c6 sekai
I like the character development
I like the character development
12/29/2013 c4 Monique
brooooooooo i've been here since day 1 (2010) keep writing the stories they're the shit!
brooooooooo i've been here since day 1 (2010) keep writing the stories they're the shit!
1/28/2013 c2 Guest
I really liked this chapter, you have a good pace going. I can't wait to see what happens next! I've also been thinking about writing a story with a Neo-Nazi character for a looonggg time now, but I've always been worried about how it would be received. I may just go ahead with it now! Keep up the good work!
I really liked this chapter, you have a good pace going. I can't wait to see what happens next! I've also been thinking about writing a story with a Neo-Nazi character for a looonggg time now, but I've always been worried about how it would be received. I may just go ahead with it now! Keep up the good work!
12/24/2012 c1 KillaCupcakes
I like this rewrite. Derek seems like a real a-hole, but I like that about his character because he comes across as a real person with issues. I also like that he's unpopular, feared, and disliked by his schoolmates. Nice touch.
I love the extra personality you've given Jessica in this version. She seems like a firecracker. That's a good thing. You seem to have a really good grasp of teens and how they interact with each other that gives this story an air of authenticity.
I'm curious about Robert as well. Can't wait to see more of him.
The only error I noticed is that you switch between past tense and present tense. Pick one and stick with it. Otherwise, I'll say you're off to a really good start. Keep improving. Keep writing. Update soon!
I like this rewrite. Derek seems like a real a-hole, but I like that about his character because he comes across as a real person with issues. I also like that he's unpopular, feared, and disliked by his schoolmates. Nice touch.
I love the extra personality you've given Jessica in this version. She seems like a firecracker. That's a good thing. You seem to have a really good grasp of teens and how they interact with each other that gives this story an air of authenticity.
I'm curious about Robert as well. Can't wait to see more of him.
The only error I noticed is that you switch between past tense and present tense. Pick one and stick with it. Otherwise, I'll say you're off to a really good start. Keep improving. Keep writing. Update soon!