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Beautiful imagery in the first half. I think that description of the lightning might seem little bit unweildly for a line or two, but it rebounds in the last few lines. Love the ending. Just a note: a few minor spelling/ grammar errors. Nothing too major, but you may want to spell check.
Beautiful imagery in the first half. I think that description of the lightning might seem little bit unweildly for a line or two, but it rebounds in the last few lines. Love the ending. Just a note: a few minor spelling/ grammar errors. Nothing too major, but you may want to spell check.