for Forget the Polar Bears, Save the People5/29/2010 c1 Icyfire4w5
I once overheard somebody saying half-jokingly that cockroaches would survive climate change but we humans wouldn't. I've always felt apathetic about climate change until newspapers point out how messed up the Earth has become. Besides, I'm experiencing some sort of heatwave nowadays, and even my sweat can't cool me down. Your poem shows that climate change is indeed an urgent problem.
I once overheard somebody saying half-jokingly that cockroaches would survive climate change but we humans wouldn't. I've always felt apathetic about climate change until newspapers point out how messed up the Earth has become. Besides, I'm experiencing some sort of heatwave nowadays, and even my sweat can't cool me down. Your poem shows that climate change is indeed an urgent problem.
3/8/2010 c1 
21Sercus Kaynine
Woot! Environment love FTW amiga!
I think that pretty much sums up my feelings about the piece. Love the point you make.
Good job and good luck in WCC!
21Sercus KaynineWoot! Environment love FTW amiga!
I think that pretty much sums up my feelings about the piece. Love the point you make.
Good job and good luck in WCC!
3/7/2010 c1 4lookingwest
Wow, that's certainly a very different perspective! The repetition of the last line of each stanza ending with "too" really held this together and it definitley had a good flow to it, it seemed like it came effortlessly instead of forced and that's always a treat when poets can do that ;). I would have never thought on the whole situation as juxtaposing humans with the polar bears from this perspective because all in all it's very simple to say we're all in big trouble-the entire world and every animal included. But I like how you separate and narrow down to humans as well. Interesting read, good luck in the WCC!
4lookingwestWow, that's certainly a very different perspective! The repetition of the last line of each stanza ending with "too" really held this together and it definitley had a good flow to it, it seemed like it came effortlessly instead of forced and that's always a treat when poets can do that ;). I would have never thought on the whole situation as juxtaposing humans with the polar bears from this perspective because all in all it's very simple to say we're all in big trouble-the entire world and every animal included. But I like how you separate and narrow down to humans as well. Interesting read, good luck in the WCC!
3/7/2010 c1 871no.peace.los.angeles
First off, I love the title. Very nice. I like the idea of this, but I feel like it's a little too protest-y in nature. Which isn't necessarily a bad thing, just a little predictable. And it feels really repetitive, with all the "too"s. But it's a nice idea, and a different take on the prompt. Keep writing, and good luck in the WCC! :)
871no.peace.los.angelesFirst off, I love the title. Very nice. I like the idea of this, but I feel like it's a little too protest-y in nature. Which isn't necessarily a bad thing, just a little predictable. And it feels really repetitive, with all the "too"s. But it's a nice idea, and a different take on the prompt. Keep writing, and good luck in the WCC! :)
3/5/2010 c1 30sophiesix
i like where you took the prompt - i never would've thought of that angle. And yes I guess we all probly shoulda because you're right it is such a pressing issue in all sorts of spheres. What would've polished your poem off for me would be a greater 'bond' between teh reader and teh narrator? I'm tossing up whether that would be acheived by more details of one particular person as a narrator, buliding empathy for their particular situsation, or whether you could use several voices from several different situations but all with teh same issue - harder to do but I guess does give that global issue feel more. I kinda get teh feel that thats what you went for here, because images like 'your logging clears my forests' and 'my entire nation washed away' are for me pictures from different places, so I'm wondering whether that broad scale effect has toned down teh empathy one might dvlp if you focused on one person? Dunno. just my thoughts anyways :) Thanks for an interesting read!
30sophiesixi like where you took the prompt - i never would've thought of that angle. And yes I guess we all probly shoulda because you're right it is such a pressing issue in all sorts of spheres. What would've polished your poem off for me would be a greater 'bond' between teh reader and teh narrator? I'm tossing up whether that would be acheived by more details of one particular person as a narrator, buliding empathy for their particular situsation, or whether you could use several voices from several different situations but all with teh same issue - harder to do but I guess does give that global issue feel more. I kinda get teh feel that thats what you went for here, because images like 'your logging clears my forests' and 'my entire nation washed away' are for me pictures from different places, so I'm wondering whether that broad scale effect has toned down teh empathy one might dvlp if you focused on one person? Dunno. just my thoughts anyways :) Thanks for an interesting read!