for Disappeared11/5/2011 c22 DiamondWolf14
I don't know...Everything just happened so fast, too fast. Besides, after making them go all over the world, I doubt Mr Carson would stop it so fast...He wasn't lying, was he?
I don't know...Everything just happened so fast, too fast. Besides, after making them go all over the world, I doubt Mr Carson would stop it so fast...He wasn't lying, was he?
11/5/2011 c21 DiamondWolf14
Strange and interesting...Written in a way that wants to make me know more.
Strange and interesting...Written in a way that wants to make me know more.
4/21/2011 c20 RenewedTruth
You told me to give your latest work a chance claiming you had gotten better and I decided that (as you put it)I had nothing better to do in my sad boring and would read your newest chapter and give you a chance. However I had to read no more than the first 9 lines to see that your flow has become stunned and your openings still need work, not to mention your rather obvious lack of knowledge on the setting for your story. You asked for a chance and proved only that if anything your work had diminished. For your future uses it is noteworthy that the tallest building in Shanghai has only 101 floors.
Sincerely yours,
RenewedTruth
Q.E.D.
You told me to give your latest work a chance claiming you had gotten better and I decided that (as you put it)I had nothing better to do in my sad boring and would read your newest chapter and give you a chance. However I had to read no more than the first 9 lines to see that your flow has become stunned and your openings still need work, not to mention your rather obvious lack of knowledge on the setting for your story. You asked for a chance and proved only that if anything your work had diminished. For your future uses it is noteworthy that the tallest building in Shanghai has only 101 floors.
Sincerely yours,
RenewedTruth
Q.E.D.
4/20/2011 c1 RenewedTruth
Your writing style is flatly bad, and your grammar needs a lot of work as well. Simply put your largest and most audacious mistake and disgrace for the English language is the improper use of whom. Everywhere that you used whom you should have used who. Please correct that mistake so that you look less of a fool.
Sincerely yours,
RenewedTruth
Q.E.D.
Your writing style is flatly bad, and your grammar needs a lot of work as well. Simply put your largest and most audacious mistake and disgrace for the English language is the improper use of whom. Everywhere that you used whom you should have used who. Please correct that mistake so that you look less of a fool.
Sincerely yours,
RenewedTruth
Q.E.D.
4/20/2011 c20 
2DiamondWolf14
Oh god, it's so interesting! You end it of right at the interestingest bit! I can't wait for the next chapter!
2DiamondWolf14Oh god, it's so interesting! You end it of right at the interestingest bit! I can't wait for the next chapter!
3/30/2011 c19 Lyra
It's so good! Please continue! Where do you get all the ideas from?
It's so good! Please continue! Where do you get all the ideas from?
3/25/2011 c19 superman
OMG i love this story its vary um (lack of discriptive words) i dont know but infinity needs to hurry up and start printing paper copies once she finishes these stories cuz they are definately ones that i would add to my library lol any way enough with the pleasantries i need to point out some hopefully constructive criticisms that simply need to be addressed. i love how when Kiya is pregnant it takes so long for the symptomes to become prominant now i dont know how long is normal for a woman cuz im not one but im oretty sure it takes only about three to four weeks and i dont knoe if im imagining this but i seem to remember that it took two months for the letter to arrive at her house and a couple more days before she decided to leave so she should have been experiencing morning symptoms long before then ,moving on, id like to see in future chapters her sister play a bigger role because they had so much in common and i cant believe that they didnt decide to travel together so maybe a reunion later on because her sister had a stronger feeling to help her or something like that and maybe her or her boyfriend end up as a bad guy its late so imo have to cut this critique short keep om writing kiddo i love what you've got so far ";)
OMG i love this story its vary um (lack of discriptive words) i dont know but infinity needs to hurry up and start printing paper copies once she finishes these stories cuz they are definately ones that i would add to my library lol any way enough with the pleasantries i need to point out some hopefully constructive criticisms that simply need to be addressed. i love how when Kiya is pregnant it takes so long for the symptomes to become prominant now i dont know how long is normal for a woman cuz im not one but im oretty sure it takes only about three to four weeks and i dont knoe if im imagining this but i seem to remember that it took two months for the letter to arrive at her house and a couple more days before she decided to leave so she should have been experiencing morning symptoms long before then ,moving on, id like to see in future chapters her sister play a bigger role because they had so much in common and i cant believe that they didnt decide to travel together so maybe a reunion later on because her sister had a stronger feeling to help her or something like that and maybe her or her boyfriend end up as a bad guy its late so imo have to cut this critique short keep om writing kiddo i love what you've got so far ";)
2/13/2011 c19 IAmEmeraldfae
Awesome story! and I love Griffin too! Luv ur story, update soon.. Please?
Awesome story! and I love Griffin too! Luv ur story, update soon.. Please?
1/16/2011 c19 9CharissaKarn
Thank you for the update! :) I absolutely loved this chapter! :) It is making me wonder what is going to happen next! :) you are an amazing writer! :) keep up the awesome work! :)
9CharissaKarnThank you for the update! :) I absolutely loved this chapter! :) It is making me wonder what is going to happen next! :) you are an amazing writer! :) keep up the awesome work! :)
12/11/2010 c18 1Vicki Lawson
what an adventure these two had! how nice of Alec to stick by Kiya but can you please write more chapters? I'm looking forward to what happens next!
1Vicki Lawsonwhat an adventure these two had! how nice of Alec to stick by Kiya but can you please write more chapters? I'm looking forward to what happens next!