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3/15/2010 c1 13Tsumujikaze no Soujutsu
Well, on your A/N, after seeing this chapter, I know what you mean by the chapter length. It's not a good idea to stretch a story beyond the credibility of it's plot. That will create too much convoluted shit to take care of. That's the main problem I've got in reading the Naruto manga not to mention the possible fact that Bleach and One Piece might apply to the same logic as well due to their extensive volume length. Anyway, I really laughed out loud in seeing the title. It really seems like a title meant to be a parody humor to me. In fact if you want to input other aspects into the plot, this is a good way to go. I've never read the Twilight books or seen the movies, but I believe I would enjoy this story if you can make it into somewhat of a parody on that one. Trust me you will earn new friends if you do that. So far, only die-hard romantics like Twilight and the rest more or less hated it. ;) And don't worry too much about your chapters being too short. I for one enjoy reading short chapters because they're easier on my attention span. :) Apart from that, nothing much to say. My brain is a bit to jumbled up to say anything coherent now. Hope that this review helps. :)

P.S: Return this review via The Eternal Grail. :)
3/14/2010 c1 7zombie chickens
"You're not fat, just . . . big-furred."-Nice cover. lol! I know what it's lie to have a..portly cat around. XD

"I ain't had a fit meal fer fifteen moons ago . . . "-I love the way the hobo vampire talks. Definitely a nice change from all the sexy vampires out there. This is so funny!

Henny frowned, but stepped closer all the same.-Noo! Why did she do that? The guy just tried to EAT her cat.

Every time the phrase hobo vampire was repeated in this story I had to laugh. Those are two words that I would have never thought would be put together. And yet they're such a natural.

you will have become attracted to sleeping under freight cars, stealing pies from windowsills, and eating canned beans."-awesome.

Anyway, great chapter, I like the way you set the story up and the humor is amazing. You've set yourself a decent length and I look forward to whatever you add in the future.
3/14/2010 c1 4123HSMluver
Aww this is cute! I think you should keep going with it :] You sound like you know what you're doing :D And besides, there's no rules with fantasy :D

"You're not fat, just . . . big-furred." - HEHE I LOVEED THAT SO MUCH! :D

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