for My Messed Up Summer8/7/2012 c3 
1Ari091
I enjoyed reading these 3 chapters can't wait to read what is going to happen next, i like the interactions between Tessa and Joe. Keep it up.
1Ari091I enjoyed reading these 3 chapters can't wait to read what is going to happen next, i like the interactions between Tessa and Joe. Keep it up.
1/21/2011 c1 Muffinmaster1
I loved the story! All I could find wrong with it was a few minor errors in spelling, acually it was just one mistake. So that's fantastic! Only one mistake, great descriptions, well thought out exposition, and very enjoyable to read!
Anyhow, if you want to you can read Everlasting (my story, it's in progress), you can. But you don't have to, though it would be nice to get more constructive critisizm. I like to improve my stories and advance my writing abilities.
I loved the story! All I could find wrong with it was a few minor errors in spelling, acually it was just one mistake. So that's fantastic! Only one mistake, great descriptions, well thought out exposition, and very enjoyable to read!
Anyhow, if you want to you can read Everlasting (my story, it's in progress), you can. But you don't have to, though it would be nice to get more constructive critisizm. I like to improve my stories and advance my writing abilities.
10/20/2010 c1 Alice Silverglow
HMPH! rude joe! but i think i know what his propblem is... I LOVED YOUR STORY "Grasping Reality" I ABSOULTLY LOVED IT! but what was harvey really drawing all those times?
HMPH! rude joe! but i think i know what his propblem is... I LOVED YOUR STORY "Grasping Reality" I ABSOULTLY LOVED IT! but what was harvey really drawing all those times?
9/27/2010 c2 1MadeleineMHM
Hey there,
I read a few of your other stories and they were great but this one is probly the best so far! :) Can't wait to read more. BTW, I think that Joe is a dick but I understand that he was told to act like that...I want him to get nice! I love Tessa - Sassy and cool! Nice heroine!
xoxox Maddy
1MadeleineMHMHey there,
I read a few of your other stories and they were great but this one is probly the best so far! :) Can't wait to read more. BTW, I think that Joe is a dick but I understand that he was told to act like that...I want him to get nice! I love Tessa - Sassy and cool! Nice heroine!
xoxox Maddy
3/22/2010 c2 6DragonRiderofPern
Okay, first of all it is a good idea for a story and the plot seems to be moving in the right direction. Your spelling seems over all good and I only noticed a few mistakes. I am impressed that you were able to pick up a story after putting it down for a while. I never would have guessed between chapters that that would be the case.
The second chapter had a lot of people in it and was sort of confusing. Sometimes you couldn't be sure who was talking and stuff like that. Other than that the only other thing I would have to say about the story is that you should probably ease up on some of the language. It doesn't help the story at all and only makes it seem cheesy in a sense.
Overall good job.
6DragonRiderofPernOkay, first of all it is a good idea for a story and the plot seems to be moving in the right direction. Your spelling seems over all good and I only noticed a few mistakes. I am impressed that you were able to pick up a story after putting it down for a while. I never would have guessed between chapters that that would be the case.
The second chapter had a lot of people in it and was sort of confusing. Sometimes you couldn't be sure who was talking and stuff like that. Other than that the only other thing I would have to say about the story is that you should probably ease up on some of the language. It doesn't help the story at all and only makes it seem cheesy in a sense.
Overall good job.
3/21/2010 c2 tannyapple
i really like it though i got confused with the sudden introduction of so many characters in chapter 2 but it was fine after i re-read it lol cant wait to see what happens with Joe and Tessa it sounds like its going to get very intresting :D please update soon xx
i really like it though i got confused with the sudden introduction of so many characters in chapter 2 but it was fine after i re-read it lol cant wait to see what happens with Joe and Tessa it sounds like its going to get very intresting :D please update soon xx
3/17/2010 c1 5caitlynpme
Continue! I really want to see where Tessa and "Joe" get from being awful to eachother. I like Tessa alot, I pitied her when dropped the dish, I was like, "No! You were so close!" Haha, but seriously, continue cause now I'm hooked and want desperately too see where things go.
5caitlynpmeContinue! I really want to see where Tessa and "Joe" get from being awful to eachother. I like Tessa alot, I pitied her when dropped the dish, I was like, "No! You were so close!" Haha, but seriously, continue cause now I'm hooked and want desperately too see where things go.