for Valentine's Day12/19/2010 c1 
26pinkguppie
I really would like a gay friend - Daren sounds amazing. Apparently they are quite awesome... hmm now top of my Santa list. Her aunt sounds amazing.
-About half way down when she wakes up at his place she thinks 'my mom would kill me' - do you mean 'my mom would have killed me' or 'my aunt would kill me'?
A little after that it says 'tired oh home'. of?
Fantastic story - good character construction. One thing(that I do a lot too) is that the story moves very fast, if you wanted to make it more realistic it should take place over a longer time period. Great work though :)
26pinkguppieI really would like a gay friend - Daren sounds amazing. Apparently they are quite awesome... hmm now top of my Santa list. Her aunt sounds amazing.
-About half way down when she wakes up at his place she thinks 'my mom would kill me' - do you mean 'my mom would have killed me' or 'my aunt would kill me'?
A little after that it says 'tired oh home'. of?
Fantastic story - good character construction. One thing(that I do a lot too) is that the story moves very fast, if you wanted to make it more realistic it should take place over a longer time period. Great work though :)
9/16/2010 c1 8Creative Pumpkin
just to start off... AWESOME! also, you said she was 18, but then said that he proposed to her a few years afterward, but first you said that she was 18 years old...
8Creative Pumpkinjust to start off... AWESOME! also, you said she was 18, but then said that he proposed to her a few years afterward, but first you said that she was 18 years old...
5/1/2010 c1 5not-so-muggle
Ahh this is ALSO so cute :) I read three years first and now I read this one. Oh I love it :D You should write longer chaptered stories! :)
Love it:)
-Isa
5not-so-muggleAhh this is ALSO so cute :) I read three years first and now I read this one. Oh I love it :D You should write longer chaptered stories! :)
Love it:)
-Isa