for All That Glitters7/12/2010 c7 
13VelvetyCheerio
Gah! I've been on sporadically, so getting to my alerts has been hard. Sorry! :|
It was an interesting end... sorta end. :P I was surprised by Violet's quick decision to turn over a new leaf, if only somewhat. If this had a sequel, I could see her going back to the pickpocket life. It's just too easy.
As for Liam, well! I really liked his character turn around. When he outed Violet, I just got a totally different vibe from him, it was amazing. I liked it. It was dark, but cunning. Very nice.
Things did progress quickly, and I wish there had been *one* more chapter, but it's alright. I'm glad things worked out for Violet in the end and that Liam and she might end up being friends after all.
A great short story, an interesting set of characters, and a nice plot. Keep it up!
Velvet.
13VelvetyCheerioGah! I've been on sporadically, so getting to my alerts has been hard. Sorry! :|
It was an interesting end... sorta end. :P I was surprised by Violet's quick decision to turn over a new leaf, if only somewhat. If this had a sequel, I could see her going back to the pickpocket life. It's just too easy.
As for Liam, well! I really liked his character turn around. When he outed Violet, I just got a totally different vibe from him, it was amazing. I liked it. It was dark, but cunning. Very nice.
Things did progress quickly, and I wish there had been *one* more chapter, but it's alright. I'm glad things worked out for Violet in the end and that Liam and she might end up being friends after all.
A great short story, an interesting set of characters, and a nice plot. Keep it up!
Velvet.
6/30/2010 c1 fast
wow this is really good! I found it through ador and juliet. lol. i really like it.
wow this is really good! I found it through ador and juliet. lol. i really like it.
6/22/2010 c7 sanzo-reload
Wait... Is this the end of the story?
I'm kinda confused..
Anyway, omg! Cutenes overload..
Vi and Liam are just to adorable~!
Make the story longer pls..
Wait... Is this the end of the story?
I'm kinda confused..
Anyway, omg! Cutenes overload..
Vi and Liam are just to adorable~!
Make the story longer pls..
6/13/2010 c7 99Dreamers-Requiem
Although I would have liked to have seen more of Liam and Violet together, I think that worked really well as an ending. It was all wrapped up nicely together, which made it quite realistic, there's that sense of 'what will happen now' which makes the reader want to know more yet which makes for a nice ending. It was a good chapter, although you might want to have a few scene breaks when the place changes, it sometimes got a bit confusing. Other than that, I really enjoyed reading this.
99Dreamers-RequiemAlthough I would have liked to have seen more of Liam and Violet together, I think that worked really well as an ending. It was all wrapped up nicely together, which made it quite realistic, there's that sense of 'what will happen now' which makes the reader want to know more yet which makes for a nice ending. It was a good chapter, although you might want to have a few scene breaks when the place changes, it sometimes got a bit confusing. Other than that, I really enjoyed reading this.
6/9/2010 c6 Dreamers-Requiem
I can't believe there's only one more chapter to read of this! I'm going to feel sad when I finish it. Anyways, nice chapter, I look forward to seeing Liam reappear. However, I do think there's a lot more you could have done with this chapter - she's in a cell, and i know you have her reflecting on the situation but I don't think you really show how it feels to be caught/trapped like that. Just something you might want to think about :) Nice work so far, I've really enjoyed every chapter
I can't believe there's only one more chapter to read of this! I'm going to feel sad when I finish it. Anyways, nice chapter, I look forward to seeing Liam reappear. However, I do think there's a lot more you could have done with this chapter - she's in a cell, and i know you have her reflecting on the situation but I don't think you really show how it feels to be caught/trapped like that. Just something you might want to think about :) Nice work so far, I've really enjoyed every chapter
6/8/2010 c7 3aby pwn u
NO WAYY! How could it end NOW!
There shouldbe more of a future! Hope ur free son!
3aby pwn uNO WAYY! How could it end NOW!
There shouldbe more of a future! Hope ur free son!
6/7/2010 c7 211cina24
I seriously wonder how the heck Liam is going to respond if Violet tells him all of her lies and confesses!
Ooh, like in other stories when they confess, I can only be pessimistic about this... :(
211cina24I seriously wonder how the heck Liam is going to respond if Violet tells him all of her lies and confesses!
Ooh, like in other stories when they confess, I can only be pessimistic about this... :(
6/6/2010 c7 3Princess of Chocolate
The word 'later' implies 'a hella-lotta shitload of trouble for Vi' ahahaha. :)
3Princess of ChocolateThe word 'later' implies 'a hella-lotta shitload of trouble for Vi' ahahaha. :)
6/6/2010 c7 5eehornburg
Great story! It was so much fun! I kinda wish that you would go a bit more into Liam's character. It seems like there's more to him than what you see, and it would be great to get to know him more. So there is room for more story! Maybe a squeal? I would read it! But for a story that is short, it was great. I'm sad it's over!
5eehornburgGreat story! It was so much fun! I kinda wish that you would go a bit more into Liam's character. It seems like there's more to him than what you see, and it would be great to get to know him more. So there is room for more story! Maybe a squeal? I would read it! But for a story that is short, it was great. I'm sad it's over!
6/6/2010 c7 cookiewolf
aww lool
i cant believe he brought her a ring;..how did he know.
lol when was like 'just dont go taking my watch' so he wasnt drunk but that is sweet.
yay no more lies, i remmeber watching a horro film about falling asleep on the subway then the person got hunted and killed. lol
great chapter=D
aww lool
i cant believe he brought her a ring;..how did he know.
lol when was like 'just dont go taking my watch' so he wasnt drunk but that is sweet.
yay no more lies, i remmeber watching a horro film about falling asleep on the subway then the person got hunted and killed. lol
great chapter=D
6/5/2010 c7 6MeAsIAm
WOw! :P I seriously loved this chapter. Liam was awesome!This is the end? Wait, what? No...
You could have done something more to the end though - too hurried. :D
6MeAsIAmWOw! :P I seriously loved this chapter. Liam was awesome!This is the end? Wait, what? No...
You could have done something more to the end though - too hurried. :D
6/5/2010 c7 6EmmaWoodhouse88
Was that the end of it? It was a good ending, but I still want to know what happensnext... lol.
6EmmaWoodhouse88Was that the end of it? It was a good ending, but I still want to know what happensnext... lol.