for The Hidden Gun4/1/2010 c1 
29YasuRan
There are a number of possibilities that this story could lead into. A clearer explanation of Riley's past could be one of them since I got the idea that you wanted to reveal more as the chapters progressed. Although the prologue was clear and the plot well-defined for the most part, I thought it lacked a little substance. As in, you seemed to basically narrating an account of the events that take place as opposed to revealing depth to which this affects everyone present. Still, it's just the prologue so I suppose I should expect more in the next few chapters? Keep writing anyway and have fun with it :)
29YasuRanThere are a number of possibilities that this story could lead into. A clearer explanation of Riley's past could be one of them since I got the idea that you wanted to reveal more as the chapters progressed. Although the prologue was clear and the plot well-defined for the most part, I thought it lacked a little substance. As in, you seemed to basically narrating an account of the events that take place as opposed to revealing depth to which this affects everyone present. Still, it's just the prologue so I suppose I should expect more in the next few chapters? Keep writing anyway and have fun with it :)