for Romanticide10/12/2010 c1 
22lipleaf
This is a nice spin on the often-used 'butterflies in your stomach.' I like the way you took a classic cliche and turned it into something totally different. I think the "just" at the beginning of the fourth line is a bit superfluous, though- it sounds off. Leaving it as "one kiss that..." would be fine. :)
22lipleafThis is a nice spin on the often-used 'butterflies in your stomach.' I like the way you took a classic cliche and turned it into something totally different. I think the "just" at the beginning of the fourth line is a bit superfluous, though- it sounds off. Leaving it as "one kiss that..." would be fine. :)
9/10/2010 c1 29The-Unwanted-Puppy
I'm jealous of how you can tell such a beautiful story in so little words. I'm miss when kisses were that wonderful. Now I just kiss my husband to shut him up. lol j/j
29The-Unwanted-PuppyI'm jealous of how you can tell such a beautiful story in so little words. I'm miss when kisses were that wonderful. Now I just kiss my husband to shut him up. lol j/j
8/12/2010 c1 fleur de l'est
I like the contrast between how frail she is and how easily he could influence them both.
A great word :)
I like the contrast between how frail she is and how easily he could influence them both.
A great word :)
5/20/2010 c1 7Julius Julius
This feels like a more mature, articulated version of having the butterfly feeling in your chest if there can be one. I always found uniqueness in changing the way quotidian ways of thinking are manipulated quite fun, and you do it especially well here.
7Julius JuliusThis feels like a more mature, articulated version of having the butterfly feeling in your chest if there can be one. I always found uniqueness in changing the way quotidian ways of thinking are manipulated quite fun, and you do it especially well here.
5/15/2010 c1 4InfinitePrincessx3
I like your picture on your profile, very mysterious...
Cool poem, I like it, very short but good still, so It's a favorite xD
-InfinitePrincessx3
4InfinitePrincessx3I like your picture on your profile, very mysterious...
Cool poem, I like it, very short but good still, so It's a favorite xD
-InfinitePrincessx3
5/15/2010 c1 871no.peace.los.angeles
I love how you took something as cliche as butterflies in the stomach and made it into something unique and beautiful. Lovely. And the whole idea of someone killing someone with kisses is common, too, but you made it your own - romanticide. Very cool. Keep writing! :)
871no.peace.los.angelesI love how you took something as cliche as butterflies in the stomach and made it into something unique and beautiful. Lovely. And the whole idea of someone killing someone with kisses is common, too, but you made it your own - romanticide. Very cool. Keep writing! :)