for Poem: Last Night6/5/2012 c1 
14Amber Panda
T.T Dude, that was seriously intence! It remined me of this enactment our drama class did last year before prom to remind us all of the effects of drunk driving. It was heartwerenching. The only difference was a girl was the only survivor but she hadn't been drinking. They showed us everything in the school parking lot from the crash site to how to retrive the bodies from the smashed cars to taking Zoe away in an ambulance. Then they made us watch a movie that they put together about what the familys thought and about those kid's lifes. It was really heartbreaking. They whole school cried. This really reminded me about that. And it broke my heart. :( It was a good poem though. It made me think about what happened and never to drink and drive. :) so your message does get across one way or another.
14Amber PandaT.T Dude, that was seriously intence! It remined me of this enactment our drama class did last year before prom to remind us all of the effects of drunk driving. It was heartwerenching. The only difference was a girl was the only survivor but she hadn't been drinking. They showed us everything in the school parking lot from the crash site to how to retrive the bodies from the smashed cars to taking Zoe away in an ambulance. Then they made us watch a movie that they put together about what the familys thought and about those kid's lifes. It was really heartbreaking. They whole school cried. This really reminded me about that. And it broke my heart. :( It was a good poem though. It made me think about what happened and never to drink and drive. :) so your message does get across one way or another.
5/22/2012 c1 15Natari Mirumura
WOW. This poem is one of the most intense poems I've read on this site! The descriptions were done extreamly well, and I feel if a plot is to be thought into this, it'd make one heck of a story. OUTSTANDING job, keep it up .
15Natari MirumuraWOW. This poem is one of the most intense poems I've read on this site! The descriptions were done extreamly well, and I feel if a plot is to be thought into this, it'd make one heck of a story. OUTSTANDING job, keep it up .
4/19/2010 c1 11HiddenFromYou
You deliver a powerful message in this poem. How no one ever thinks this kind of thing will happen to them. Everyone thinks they're immortal to drink driving, but they're not.
The use of the word "shrew" threw me off the flow of the poem. Even though I understood it, it took me several read throughs of the line to do so, and that obviously took me out of the poem.
For this line: "Last night, we managed to live long enough to get was last look at eachother" I believe the "was" is meant to be "one" and a space is meant to be there between "each" and "other".
The ending is a little cliched, and I think you repeated the words "last night" too many times, but I still liked the ending quite a bit.
11HiddenFromYouYou deliver a powerful message in this poem. How no one ever thinks this kind of thing will happen to them. Everyone thinks they're immortal to drink driving, but they're not.
The use of the word "shrew" threw me off the flow of the poem. Even though I understood it, it took me several read throughs of the line to do so, and that obviously took me out of the poem.
For this line: "Last night, we managed to live long enough to get was last look at eachother" I believe the "was" is meant to be "one" and a space is meant to be there between "each" and "other".
The ending is a little cliched, and I think you repeated the words "last night" too many times, but I still liked the ending quite a bit.