for Elemental Escape7/20/2010 c13 Yyunesprith
Nice stuff you've got here, Tango. I like your characterization. Now what I'm wondering is whether Tracker and company will reach Luke's mom's place before or after A and M get back from their little jaunt...
Nice stuff you've got here, Tango. I like your characterization. Now what I'm wondering is whether Tracker and company will reach Luke's mom's place before or after A and M get back from their little jaunt...
7/20/2010 c13 Kyre Crow
I really liked this chapter. I liked the way it explained so much, leaving so much room for doubt. All the animals are noticing her; is her trip to Ryzo's going to be important? And also, I was wondering about the characters without emotion. It's an interesting idea. Is there gonna be any way to save M? Very good chapter. Keep going!
I really liked this chapter. I liked the way it explained so much, leaving so much room for doubt. All the animals are noticing her; is her trip to Ryzo's going to be important? And also, I was wondering about the characters without emotion. It's an interesting idea. Is there gonna be any way to save M? Very good chapter. Keep going!
7/18/2010 c13 Sammyjon123
Oh snap o_o Why must M start killing stuff?
This was a really good chapter. During the mugging, though, you wrote: 'I guess that was the moment to decide I was in danger. He stepped in front of me, eyes narrowing.' Who did? it was clear that it was M, but you needed to actually mention him. Other than that, though, I don't see any issues. Good chapter, update soon!
Oh snap o_o Why must M start killing stuff?
This was a really good chapter. During the mugging, though, you wrote: 'I guess that was the moment to decide I was in danger. He stepped in front of me, eyes narrowing.' Who did? it was clear that it was M, but you needed to actually mention him. Other than that, though, I don't see any issues. Good chapter, update soon!
7/16/2010 c12 True Pandemonium
"Hi Mom." Ahh that was a freakin amazing cliffhanger. I loved this chapter, especially when V says "C'mere" when A is shivering. Haha it was too cute! Can't wait till the next chapter!
"Hi Mom." Ahh that was a freakin amazing cliffhanger. I loved this chapter, especially when V says "C'mere" when A is shivering. Haha it was too cute! Can't wait till the next chapter!
7/12/2010 c12 
1Sirens And Muses
Muse:...On the count of three...
Siren: AW!
Muse: Called it.
Siren: He found him mommy...that's so sweet.
Muse: V needs some work on his personal skills. I guess I should call him Luke now, huh?
Siren: Update soon! Please?
1Sirens And MusesMuse:...On the count of three...
Siren: AW!
Muse: Called it.
Siren: He found him mommy...that's so sweet.
Muse: V needs some work on his personal skills. I guess I should call him Luke now, huh?
Siren: Update soon! Please?
7/11/2010 c12 Sammyjon123
Holy crap! HOLY CRAP! V, "Hi mom"! What! AH! :D
So, was this the 'Sub. V Character Development Chapter?' A lot seemed to happen to him, most notably, erm... His mom! :D
Also, I absolutely loved how he tried to get directions to the apartment. XP Poor kids.
Great chapter, and please don't wait TOO long to update. _ Cliffangers have only one fault: They leave you wondering what happens next.
Holy crap! HOLY CRAP! V, "Hi mom"! What! AH! :D
So, was this the 'Sub. V Character Development Chapter?' A lot seemed to happen to him, most notably, erm... His mom! :D
Also, I absolutely loved how he tried to get directions to the apartment. XP Poor kids.
Great chapter, and please don't wait TOO long to update. _ Cliffangers have only one fault: They leave you wondering what happens next.
7/7/2010 c11 Sirens And Muses
Siren: It's true, city people do hate snakes. For example, Muse hates snakes.
Muse: Creep me out. Which is why I sleep on your couch and not your spare room.
Siren: Hey, Yuan The Sexy Snake needed a place to sleep.
Muse: We're on a tangent again. Awesome chapter, update soon!
Siren: It's true, city people do hate snakes. For example, Muse hates snakes.
Muse: Creep me out. Which is why I sleep on your couch and not your spare room.
Siren: Hey, Yuan The Sexy Snake needed a place to sleep.
Muse: We're on a tangent again. Awesome chapter, update soon!
7/4/2010 c11 Bjibs
I kinda feel bad for them. The whole not knowing what to do. And A sounds like me when someones hitting on me, only I realize it after... Ya know what? I never said that.
I kinda feel bad for them. The whole not knowing what to do. And A sounds like me when someones hitting on me, only I realize it after... Ya know what? I never said that.
7/4/2010 c11 Sammyjon123
That was, by far, the funniest, and in my opinion best, chapter yet. They just get better and better!
I absolutely love how A wound up with three purses, and the line, "I have a letter, not a number."
There's a typo at the beginning, I forget what word. You just forgot to put in one letter, so it was pretty easy to figure it out.
I'm quite happy they've made it to the city, hopefully it'll be hard for the Tracker to find them now ;-; But as Cohryn has been saying, she won't have any problems.
That was, by far, the funniest, and in my opinion best, chapter yet. They just get better and better!
I absolutely love how A wound up with three purses, and the line, "I have a letter, not a number."
There's a typo at the beginning, I forget what word. You just forgot to put in one letter, so it was pretty easy to figure it out.
I'm quite happy they've made it to the city, hopefully it'll be hard for the Tracker to find them now ;-; But as Cohryn has been saying, she won't have any problems.
7/1/2010 c10 Sirens And Muses
Siren: We're too lazy to log in...
Muse: Good chapter. I wonder if they'll make friends with Subject T?
Siren: Update soon!
Siren: We're too lazy to log in...
Muse: Good chapter. I wonder if they'll make friends with Subject T?
Siren: Update soon!
6/29/2010 c10 2melon.face
where's chapter 10! i was getting so into this story :)
please continue to update
2melon.facewhere's chapter 10! i was getting so into this story :)
please continue to update
6/28/2010 c10 Sammyjon123
Hmm, I wasn't too happy with this chapter. It seemed to be all about gratuitous violence and dirty jokes, there was no real plot progression. Also, it was way too long, you only need like, 1-5k words, not the whopping 20,0 WORD CHAPTER. Really! And, since when can Sub. M dance the tango to Holiday by Green Day? You need to explain these things! I dunno if I can continue reading this story with the direction you're pushing it in, especially after Sub. A mindlessly slaughtered all those back-up singers at the Blink 182 concert.
If today were April Fools day, and someone read this before the actual story, I would so win right now. XP I for one am still reading, and anyone who stopped is crazy. :D I have no idea about how to fix this issue, or maybe you already have, I dunno. Hopefully it won't stop you from updating :( That would suck for everyone.
Hmm, I wasn't too happy with this chapter. It seemed to be all about gratuitous violence and dirty jokes, there was no real plot progression. Also, it was way too long, you only need like, 1-5k words, not the whopping 20,0 WORD CHAPTER. Really! And, since when can Sub. M dance the tango to Holiday by Green Day? You need to explain these things! I dunno if I can continue reading this story with the direction you're pushing it in, especially after Sub. A mindlessly slaughtered all those back-up singers at the Blink 182 concert.
If today were April Fools day, and someone read this before the actual story, I would so win right now. XP I for one am still reading, and anyone who stopped is crazy. :D I have no idea about how to fix this issue, or maybe you already have, I dunno. Hopefully it won't stop you from updating :( That would suck for everyone.
6/28/2010 c10 1Jade Reine
I am reading your story and I love it! Please continue writing and update often :)
1Jade ReineI am reading your story and I love it! Please continue writing and update often :)