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for Jack's First Job The Killer Is Born

5/5/2010 c1 16Howle
Just...Great. You've got a great story going. Just ambiguous enough to be cool and concrete enough to be discernable. It's hilarious on some levels and thought provoking on others. Good job!
5/5/2010 c1 32Shelley Anderson
I love the last line! We said something similar at the dinner table tonight(my sister and I have odd conversations). I liked Jack's attitude about his actions.

I especially love the lines, "Waves of flesh roll over/ The lumpy mattress of the cemetery."

Very well done as usual, I see no mistakes to point out.

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