for Clashing love5/20/2012 c2 
3Sayure
I think it'll be more good if we couldn't read what the mystery guy think, like the mystery guy stay a mystery, well see next chapters.
Good idea for the story.
3SayureI think it'll be more good if we couldn't read what the mystery guy think, like the mystery guy stay a mystery, well see next chapters.
Good idea for the story.
8/9/2010 c9 crystal4458
O_o Keith, I freaking LOVE YOU. FOREVER.
That was amazing! I'm so proud of you T^T
I very much like this twist :3 And I hope you get over your writer's block soon. I know how infuriating it is.
:D You're awesome! *thumbs up*
O_o Keith, I freaking LOVE YOU. FOREVER.
That was amazing! I'm so proud of you T^T
I very much like this twist :3 And I hope you get over your writer's block soon. I know how infuriating it is.
:D You're awesome! *thumbs up*
7/21/2010 c9 riskroo95
Keith you could of idk spaced that lemon was hard to read and congrats on your first lemon. i miss you and i will see you when i come home and call me so we can hang out before school starts
Keith you could of idk spaced that lemon was hard to read and congrats on your first lemon. i miss you and i will see you when i come home and call me so we can hang out before school starts
7/17/2010 c9 10Sae Ayameko
Hm, well that was unexpected. Very good though however I had a bit of a problem reading the lemon. I know you already understand how to space your sentences out, that goes for the lemon too. It was a bit packed together, making it harder to read. When the words a spaced out more it catches readers attention because if it's packed together like a dictionary no matter how interesting the story is the reader will just feel like they're reading to much. But I loved how you ended the story too. That earns five starts. * Keep up the good work. ^.~
10Sae AyamekoHm, well that was unexpected. Very good though however I had a bit of a problem reading the lemon. I know you already understand how to space your sentences out, that goes for the lemon too. It was a bit packed together, making it harder to read. When the words a spaced out more it catches readers attention because if it's packed together like a dictionary no matter how interesting the story is the reader will just feel like they're reading to much. But I loved how you ended the story too. That earns five starts. * Keep up the good work. ^.~
6/23/2010 c8 Sae Ayameko
Wow. Now that was unexpected. Seriously ._. I did not see that coming but that just makes the story even more interesting. Now I have to know what happens. But how will you write it out? As a flashback or from Kalik's Prospective where Charles just speak? It really depends, that way the reader gets more in tune with story but either way is fine. Keep up the good work! Oh and um...HAPPY BIRTHDAY! ^.~
Wow. Now that was unexpected. Seriously ._. I did not see that coming but that just makes the story even more interesting. Now I have to know what happens. But how will you write it out? As a flashback or from Kalik's Prospective where Charles just speak? It really depends, that way the reader gets more in tune with story but either way is fine. Keep up the good work! Oh and um...HAPPY BIRTHDAY! ^.~
6/23/2010 c8 MuRaSaKi-Rein
*makes the same faces I made when you first told me about the twist you were planning* Wah!
*makes the same faces I made when you first told me about the twist you were planning* Wah!
6/20/2010 c1 MuRaSaKi-Rein
D'accord...(oui, francais XD)
I'm using this as a way to review your other story since I already reviewed and it wasn't a real review. Now. I say you add on to it. You have a great beginning to what can be an amazing story. So I say go for it ^^ So yeah. Hope this helps convince you to write more. Thankies :3 (HOLY CRAPPERS LOUD THUNDER...I think I should get off the computer so it doesn't explode and kill me ._.)
D'accord...(oui, francais XD)
I'm using this as a way to review your other story since I already reviewed and it wasn't a real review. Now. I say you add on to it. You have a great beginning to what can be an amazing story. So I say go for it ^^ So yeah. Hope this helps convince you to write more. Thankies :3 (HOLY CRAPPERS LOUD THUNDER...I think I should get off the computer so it doesn't explode and kill me ._.)
6/20/2010 c7 MuRaSaKi-Rein
Oh...
Quite a predicament ._.
Poor Kalik (I spelled that right, right?)
Yay I finally reviewed XD Sorry it took me so long.
Oh...
Quite a predicament ._.
Poor Kalik (I spelled that right, right?)
Yay I finally reviewed XD Sorry it took me so long.
6/19/2010 c7 riskroo95
keith you dont have an evil bone in your body i should know and i still dont get why i am the deamon i am not...evil i just have evil moments i dont act evil all the time. if i did i would not be your best friend. and i have to say useing your pretend boyfriend was a nice touch. well i want you to tell the group i said hi and i cant wait to see them when school starts.
keith you dont have an evil bone in your body i should know and i still dont get why i am the deamon i am not...evil i just have evil moments i dont act evil all the time. if i did i would not be your best friend. and i have to say useing your pretend boyfriend was a nice touch. well i want you to tell the group i said hi and i cant wait to see them when school starts.