for Mirrors3/24/2011 c1 
22Smileyface33
I love this poem! I can imagine both instances in which someone would spray paint I love you on a wall. I'm proud to say that I would be one of those women to cry! Great Job!
22Smileyface33I love this poem! I can imagine both instances in which someone would spray paint I love you on a wall. I'm proud to say that I would be one of those women to cry! Great Job!
5/27/2010 c1 Punslinger
"The bags tying a plastic tourniquet around my wrists." What a sharp observation of something so ordinay that most of us would never think of observing it. That's the way of the poem-the eye falling on a bit of trite graffiti sets off a unique chain of thoughts and emotions that makes a dull day something worth remembering.
"The bags tying a plastic tourniquet around my wrists." What a sharp observation of something so ordinay that most of us would never think of observing it. That's the way of the poem-the eye falling on a bit of trite graffiti sets off a unique chain of thoughts and emotions that makes a dull day something worth remembering.
5/21/2010 c1 Isca
"I love you. Spray-painted in white letter on the wall by a bus shelter." I love the tone of this line; it's so gripping and raw. I love that the speaker seems to believe that this is some act of god - that it's a 'sign' she's meant to see.
"Balanced on her cheekbones." Brilliant phrasing.
"Maybe a prank to make old women like me cry." What a perfect ending; it's both impactful and tragic.
Keep up the great work! :)
"I love you. Spray-painted in white letter on the wall by a bus shelter." I love the tone of this line; it's so gripping and raw. I love that the speaker seems to believe that this is some act of god - that it's a 'sign' she's meant to see.
"Balanced on her cheekbones." Brilliant phrasing.
"Maybe a prank to make old women like me cry." What a perfect ending; it's both impactful and tragic.
Keep up the great work! :)