for Midnight Blues7/2/2010 c1 
99Dreamers-Requiem
I really like this - you set it up really well with Jane's sort of life plan, and the monotony of her life up until she met Landon. In such a short space, you created two really vivid characters, and the whole story is there without getting bogged down in details. The small details you did include worked well to add to the story; nice work.
99Dreamers-RequiemI really like this - you set it up really well with Jane's sort of life plan, and the monotony of her life up until she met Landon. In such a short space, you created two really vivid characters, and the whole story is there without getting bogged down in details. The small details you did include worked well to add to the story; nice work.
6/19/2010 c1 23AvidWriter-92
Again, I like this a lot. :D
I love how this is written. :)
The main point about this that struck me was how Jane before she met Landon did everything correctly, but she didn't have a passion in her life. She was perfect, but kind of empty inside, you know?
And, then, after she met Landon, she's 'flawed' but she has a purpose and a passion for something. :)
I can totally relate to this story; I would rather have a passion for something than be perfect. :)
I like the romantic undertones when they hold hands in the cab. :P I think that the ending is perfect, although a bit short... :P Where else would they go besides Paris?
Sigh...
Great work! :D
~Avid. Roadhouse. :)
23AvidWriter-92Again, I like this a lot. :D
I love how this is written. :)
The main point about this that struck me was how Jane before she met Landon did everything correctly, but she didn't have a passion in her life. She was perfect, but kind of empty inside, you know?
And, then, after she met Landon, she's 'flawed' but she has a purpose and a passion for something. :)
I can totally relate to this story; I would rather have a passion for something than be perfect. :)
I like the romantic undertones when they hold hands in the cab. :P I think that the ending is perfect, although a bit short... :P Where else would they go besides Paris?
Sigh...
Great work! :D
~Avid. Roadhouse. :)