for The Kingdom of Rain1/25/2011 c37 
10raped by a female bunni
YAY! you're back! :D
great chapter,FINALLY she realises that turner is an un-pleasant being!
10raped by a female bunniYAY! you're back! :D
great chapter,FINALLY she realises that turner is an un-pleasant being!
12/3/2010 c34 deadgummiegirl
I really liked this chapter, but of course I like all of the chapters. I also really like Jennifer, hope she sticks around. Here's a random question: Is it wierd that I picture all of the characters in the Kingdoms to be British? That just seems like it would make sense. :)
I really liked this chapter, but of course I like all of the chapters. I also really like Jennifer, hope she sticks around. Here's a random question: Is it wierd that I picture all of the characters in the Kingdoms to be British? That just seems like it would make sense. :)
11/26/2010 c33 2tambourinegoddess
OH MAN. That was my reaction this chapter haha. I can't wait until we get to meet Jennifer. This is all very excited :D
2tambourinegoddessOH MAN. That was my reaction this chapter haha. I can't wait until we get to meet Jennifer. This is all very excited :D
11/23/2010 c32 McFisticuffs
EPIC! I love the style of this story. i haven't been keeping up very well i stoped reading for a bit but i'm glad i came back. so good. i wish lawson would come back he's still my favorite though i like phinn and turner to i even kidna like sage. i like them all! you make the characters so reall and fun and likeable
kthanks!
EPIC! I love the style of this story. i haven't been keeping up very well i stoped reading for a bit but i'm glad i came back. so good. i wish lawson would come back he's still my favorite though i like phinn and turner to i even kidna like sage. i like them all! you make the characters so reall and fun and likeable
kthanks!
11/22/2010 c32 Cassie
This is one of the most interesting things I have read on this site. I do hope you continue with it because the plot and characters are just so breathtaking to me. Currently Phinn is my favorite (and maybe Sage too :P). I have a soft spot for those types of characters.
This is one of the most interesting things I have read on this site. I do hope you continue with it because the plot and characters are just so breathtaking to me. Currently Phinn is my favorite (and maybe Sage too :P). I have a soft spot for those types of characters.
11/20/2010 c32 deadgummiegirl
Great chapter as always but, OH ELENA! So naive, I knew the moment Phinn said he was going to the dungeon she was gonna get stuck in there with him again. I love how absolutely crazy all of these people are. :)
Great chapter as always but, OH ELENA! So naive, I knew the moment Phinn said he was going to the dungeon she was gonna get stuck in there with him again. I love how absolutely crazy all of these people are. :)
11/16/2010 c31 10raped by a female bunni
AH! great! you had my hooked by the first chapter.
this was too awesome for words, i love the narrative, gives the story an upbeat vibe.
i feel really sorry Phinn, who im suprisingly starting to like.
my fav out of the brothers though is Lawson, he's really cute and i think he genuinely likes Elena, which makes me frustrated every time she runs away with turner!
hope to see a new chapter soon!
10raped by a female bunniAH! great! you had my hooked by the first chapter.
this was too awesome for words, i love the narrative, gives the story an upbeat vibe.
i feel really sorry Phinn, who im suprisingly starting to like.
my fav out of the brothers though is Lawson, he's really cute and i think he genuinely likes Elena, which makes me frustrated every time she runs away with turner!
hope to see a new chapter soon!
8/9/2010 c23 deadgummiegirl
This story deserves way more reviews than what you have. Its fantastic. It has everything you would want in a good story. Action, suspense, and the possibility of romance. Not that you don't already know how good it is, you're a fantastic writer.
This story deserves way more reviews than what you have. Its fantastic. It has everything you would want in a good story. Action, suspense, and the possibility of romance. Not that you don't already know how good it is, you're a fantastic writer.
7/19/2010 c1 3naito-kun
'In fact, she was really more the type of jovial and funny person.' somehow i thought this felt a little awkward, maybe 'In fact, she was really more like the jovial and funny type of person' would sound better?
'What sort of thing to say is that?' i get what you mean here, but it sounded a little... off to me. like maybe 'what a thing to say' would've been better, although i guess the impact wouldn't be as great.
i like your narrative voice in this story and oh man, i do hope elena regains her ability to express her creativity!
3naito-kun'In fact, she was really more the type of jovial and funny person.' somehow i thought this felt a little awkward, maybe 'In fact, she was really more like the jovial and funny type of person' would sound better?
'What sort of thing to say is that?' i get what you mean here, but it sounded a little... off to me. like maybe 'what a thing to say' would've been better, although i guess the impact wouldn't be as great.
i like your narrative voice in this story and oh man, i do hope elena regains her ability to express her creativity!
7/16/2010 c17 annon
oo awesome! lawson was so cute in thsi chapter. "Lawson appeared to think that simply repeating Elena's question was a good enough answer."
haha. so was turner. a bit of a disfunctional family
oo awesome! lawson was so cute in thsi chapter. "Lawson appeared to think that simply repeating Elena's question was a good enough answer."
haha. so was turner. a bit of a disfunctional family
7/14/2010 c16 2tambourinegoddess
Oh mann :D I'm so excited about what's going to happen next. So much intrigue!
2tambourinegoddessOh mann :D I'm so excited about what's going to happen next. So much intrigue!
7/14/2010 c13 tambourinegoddess
sbsbsjsjsnehjjbjbjvc! This story is so good :D I love the plot and the mystery! What's real? Even I don't know haha. Excellent job!
sbsbsjsjsnehjjbjbjvc! This story is so good :D I love the plot and the mystery! What's real? Even I don't know haha. Excellent job!
7/4/2010 c13 annon
really cute. i knew i liked turner best
really cute. i knew i liked turner best
7/1/2010 c12 annon
i cant wait to see how different hail is from rain
i cant wait to see how different hail is from rain
6/27/2010 c11 annon
this part:
Turner appeared thoughtful for a few moments, and then threw his arms in the air (figuratively, not literally) to show he didn't have a clue.
cracked me up. love turner. lawson's so cute all sleepy. great cliff hanger funny
this part:
Turner appeared thoughtful for a few moments, and then threw his arms in the air (figuratively, not literally) to show he didn't have a clue.
cracked me up. love turner. lawson's so cute all sleepy. great cliff hanger funny