for The Trinket Box5/24/2010 c1 Scribbler-one
First paragraph;
Excellent description that sets the foundaton for the middle and ending.
Second paragraph:
Excellent transition from one object/subject to the next. Very clear.
Third paragraph;
Very good and very emotional.
Overall:
Great viewpoint.
First paragraph;
Excellent description that sets the foundaton for the middle and ending.
Second paragraph:
Excellent transition from one object/subject to the next. Very clear.
Third paragraph;
Very good and very emotional.
Overall:
Great viewpoint.
5/23/2010 c1 
2BretheWriter
This is a great little story. It would be really awesome if you expanded it but it will be awesome either way. Thank you for writing it!
2BretheWriterThis is a great little story. It would be really awesome if you expanded it but it will be awesome either way. Thank you for writing it!