for I'm special, Bitch!11/3/2013 c1 Guest
When are the revised chapters going to be posted? Just wondering because I really want to read this story. :)
When are the revised chapters going to be posted? Just wondering because I really want to read this story. :)
7/7/2013 c1 
4Palomita love1
I want more chapters! I was really getting into the story. Good job and I hope to read more :)
4Palomita love1I want more chapters! I was really getting into the story. Good job and I hope to read more :)
4/29/2013 c1 Guest
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2/15/2013 c1 13Aaerie
Noooooooo! put it backkkkk I tried to reread this story only to find you took it down :(
13AaerieNoooooooo! put it backkkkk I tried to reread this story only to find you took it down :(
12/28/2012 c1 Delilah
Great prologue!
Great prologue!
10/19/2012 c13 3Summer's Desire
JUST GONNA REVIEW ABOUT HOW I LOVE CHYNA'S GUTS. YES, I LOVE HER SO MUCH. YAY FOR CHYNA!
3Summer's DesireJUST GONNA REVIEW ABOUT HOW I LOVE CHYNA'S GUTS. YES, I LOVE HER SO MUCH. YAY FOR CHYNA!
10/6/2012 c22 missyb1988
I totally related to this in more ways then one it was written really well and I loved the bad boy characters of course your a talented writer can't wait to check rest of your work out :)
I totally related to this in more ways then one it was written really well and I loved the bad boy characters of course your a talented writer can't wait to check rest of your work out :)
7/17/2012 c23 Keke
Hi! Your story was awesome and just AWESOME! Total swag! Well I just wanted to say thank you for sharing your story with us!
lots of love
keke
Hi! Your story was awesome and just AWESOME! Total swag! Well I just wanted to say thank you for sharing your story with us!
lots of love
keke
6/16/2012 c13 3TO-OLazyToLogin
Wow! I knew I read this before. Seeing your reply to my review, which I can't remember, finally made sense. I liked this chapter, to be honest I don't really like weak female lead characters. But she just showed her strength in this chapter. Yes!
3TO-OLazyToLoginWow! I knew I read this before. Seeing your reply to my review, which I can't remember, finally made sense. I liked this chapter, to be honest I don't really like weak female lead characters. But she just showed her strength in this chapter. Yes!
6/8/2012 c7 Mashinka
I absolutely love this chapter! This is probably the best. I like the race thingy, and the coaches, and well, love it!
I absolutely love this chapter! This is probably the best. I like the race thingy, and the coaches, and well, love it!
5/22/2012 c22 2loveofallthatisawesome
Well, I was still unsure about this story; whether I liked it or not, but this epilogue convinced me.
At first I wasn't sure what to think because, honestly, I feel like their relationship was incredibly rushed. There was nearly no development, just Chyna saying she missed Jayden, but he's not the same Jayden he was as before so wouldn't she have needed to fall in love with him again? Then Jayden was a douche for more than half of the story, and then out of nowhere Bam! he's all lovey-dovey and asking for forgiveness. It nearly made no sense, but it somehow connects. We saw almost no good from their relationship, just a couple of chapters, but like I said: the epilogue convinced me of my choice.
I've decided that I like it. The epilogue shows what we missed from their relationship. It shows how they interact as a true couple, and it gives a glimpse of what's to come.
Overall, I would say that this story could have been better written a bit, but it's a good concept and the epilogue definitely makes up for a lot of missing things. The characters are good, Sam especially, but it takes time to want to like them, and I think adding some scenes of their relationship - when Chyna was trying to get revenge - would've given the story more depth.
But don't let this discourage you! I believe you have great potential, this story was actually good, I just felt it was lacking in some aspects and I know for sure that you'll improve as time goes on and you continue writing.
2loveofallthatisawesomeWell, I was still unsure about this story; whether I liked it or not, but this epilogue convinced me.
At first I wasn't sure what to think because, honestly, I feel like their relationship was incredibly rushed. There was nearly no development, just Chyna saying she missed Jayden, but he's not the same Jayden he was as before so wouldn't she have needed to fall in love with him again? Then Jayden was a douche for more than half of the story, and then out of nowhere Bam! he's all lovey-dovey and asking for forgiveness. It nearly made no sense, but it somehow connects. We saw almost no good from their relationship, just a couple of chapters, but like I said: the epilogue convinced me of my choice.
I've decided that I like it. The epilogue shows what we missed from their relationship. It shows how they interact as a true couple, and it gives a glimpse of what's to come.
Overall, I would say that this story could have been better written a bit, but it's a good concept and the epilogue definitely makes up for a lot of missing things. The characters are good, Sam especially, but it takes time to want to like them, and I think adding some scenes of their relationship - when Chyna was trying to get revenge - would've given the story more depth.
But don't let this discourage you! I believe you have great potential, this story was actually good, I just felt it was lacking in some aspects and I know for sure that you'll improve as time goes on and you continue writing.
5/22/2012 c14 loveofallthatisawesome
Well, at least she has the decency to create a plan for revenge. I don't want her to forgive Jayden so easily. He was awfully rude in the manner in which he broke up with her, and also with the way he acts towards her now. She shouldn't give in so easily, so I'm glad she's at least sticking with her original intention.
And Jayden. Gah! He seems like he only wants her for her body right now. Just because she's pretty, but then I have to remember what he said at the beginning about her having an ugly personality, but he doesn't he as well? He just sleeps around with girls and fucking forgets their names right away. What a douche.
Well, at least she has the decency to create a plan for revenge. I don't want her to forgive Jayden so easily. He was awfully rude in the manner in which he broke up with her, and also with the way he acts towards her now. She shouldn't give in so easily, so I'm glad she's at least sticking with her original intention.
And Jayden. Gah! He seems like he only wants her for her body right now. Just because she's pretty, but then I have to remember what he said at the beginning about her having an ugly personality, but he doesn't he as well? He just sleeps around with girls and fucking forgets their names right away. What a douche.