for The Most Horrible Thing for Girls7/20/2011 c1 MyManIsFictional
Wow, I actually was thinking pregnancy for a minute there. This made me smile~
Wow, I actually was thinking pregnancy for a minute there. This made me smile~
12/1/2010 c1 The Kris Cunningham
You should replace the line "brought up a fought" with "brought up a fight". Other than this, I could find nothing that was out of place or needed to be repaired. So, there's the "fixer" section of this review.
I found this to be kind of funny, in it's down kind of way, almost like a satire of sorts. It's another introspective look, this time at a teenage woman in high school instead of a man whose lost his mind. I know I said this before, but I love the flow. It's quick, song-like, and even rhymes in some spots! All signs of a wonderful poet becoming better.
What I liked the most, though, is the final line. I could write a bland review about everything I read and liked, but I'm focusing on "I broke my nails the day before Junior Prom". This can be taken in several ways, first is the entire thing is about her breaking a nail.
Second is something happened and she's losing her mind and free-falling into an abyss of hatred and the first thing that she notices is her broken nail. This is the logic I'm in love with. It can and does function on both levels and this is what makes it so wonderful. It isn't one single idea, you can read it and come to your own conclusions (as mentioned before). Correct me if I am wrong, but that is an excellent quality in poetry. The allowance to be many things to many readers.
As always, keep writing. You have a wonderful flow and style and I'm continually amazed by what I'm reading. I'm adding you to my Favorties List now. You earned the right to be there, mate.
~ Ava
You should replace the line "brought up a fought" with "brought up a fight". Other than this, I could find nothing that was out of place or needed to be repaired. So, there's the "fixer" section of this review.
I found this to be kind of funny, in it's down kind of way, almost like a satire of sorts. It's another introspective look, this time at a teenage woman in high school instead of a man whose lost his mind. I know I said this before, but I love the flow. It's quick, song-like, and even rhymes in some spots! All signs of a wonderful poet becoming better.
What I liked the most, though, is the final line. I could write a bland review about everything I read and liked, but I'm focusing on "I broke my nails the day before Junior Prom". This can be taken in several ways, first is the entire thing is about her breaking a nail.
Second is something happened and she's losing her mind and free-falling into an abyss of hatred and the first thing that she notices is her broken nail. This is the logic I'm in love with. It can and does function on both levels and this is what makes it so wonderful. It isn't one single idea, you can read it and come to your own conclusions (as mentioned before). Correct me if I am wrong, but that is an excellent quality in poetry. The allowance to be many things to many readers.
As always, keep writing. You have a wonderful flow and style and I'm continually amazed by what I'm reading. I'm adding you to my Favorties List now. You earned the right to be there, mate.
~ Ava
8/27/2010 c1 fleur de l'est
Oh dear...
I can just imagine this happening to one of those blonde girls in an American film.
Well done for making such a huge fuss and for coming up with something so trivial :P
Oh dear...
I can just imagine this happening to one of those blonde girls in an American film.
Well done for making such a huge fuss and for coming up with something so trivial :P
8/15/2010 c1 CCKins
LOL. It was like OMG, IT FEELS LIKE DEATH HAS KISSED ME JUST BECAUSE I BROKE MY NAILS! Lovely! Really great poem!
LOL. It was like OMG, IT FEELS LIKE DEATH HAS KISSED ME JUST BECAUSE I BROKE MY NAILS! Lovely! Really great poem!
8/8/2010 c1 
26Melladonna
Very good poem and definitely funny. I loved this little work and you're right, it probably is the most horrible thing for most girls. XD
26MelladonnaVery good poem and definitely funny. I loved this little work and you're right, it probably is the most horrible thing for most girls. XD
7/1/2010 c1 3MusicKillsThePain
OMG. This was AWESOME! All freaked out because she broke her NAIL before JUNIOR prom. Wow. Really nice poem and really funny.
3MusicKillsThePainOMG. This was AWESOME! All freaked out because she broke her NAIL before JUNIOR prom. Wow. Really nice poem and really funny.
6/26/2010 c1 2Poison Sweet Madeira
Haha, I lied when I said I'd review tomorrow.
I really liked this, it was funny! At times, the rhyming sounded a little forced, but after reading the last line I went back and read it all again, seeing the irony this time. The melodrama of "as if Death gave me his deadly kiss" really made me laugh! Thank you!
~PSwM
2Poison Sweet MadeiraHaha, I lied when I said I'd review tomorrow.
I really liked this, it was funny! At times, the rhyming sounded a little forced, but after reading the last line I went back and read it all again, seeing the irony this time. The melodrama of "as if Death gave me his deadly kiss" really made me laugh! Thank you!
~PSwM
6/22/2010 c1 287Archia
I thought this was great. The rhyming was well done and I like how it seems to lead to something else. It made me laugh at the end because it is true.
287ArchiaI thought this was great. The rhyming was well done and I like how it seems to lead to something else. It made me laugh at the end because it is true.
6/22/2010 c1 8StvJ
Wow! The crescendo that you construct in this poem is extremely stylish! You make the reader feel very tense as to what this poor girl must have gone through - before climaxing with the mundane: oh she just broke her nail XD
Very tongue-in-cheek and it certainly says something about girls and their priorities in life lol :P
(p.s. thanks for your review on my poem ^_^ i hope i write more that you'll enjoy!)
8StvJWow! The crescendo that you construct in this poem is extremely stylish! You make the reader feel very tense as to what this poor girl must have gone through - before climaxing with the mundane: oh she just broke her nail XD
Very tongue-in-cheek and it certainly says something about girls and their priorities in life lol :P
(p.s. thanks for your review on my poem ^_^ i hope i write more that you'll enjoy!)