
6/4/2019 c12 annabanana1994
I know that you have discontinued this story but because I really like it, I wanted to comment just in case you decided to get back to it again in the future. Jena lacks maturity, for a twenty-year-old she doesn't always behave like one... Sometimes it is better for everyone to leave clues or to talk in a secretive manner and for the main character to be more intuitive than the other way around, to have everyone being direct and for the main character to be clueless... I say this referring to when she discovers she is Lazarus' mate but she doesn't know what that implies. Also, I couldn't see any chemistry nor sexual tension between the characters, at times it was hard to believe that they had a connection at all... either that, or it seemed like Jena was still a kid hence why she didn't feel anything.
I know that you have discontinued this story but because I really like it, I wanted to comment just in case you decided to get back to it again in the future. Jena lacks maturity, for a twenty-year-old she doesn't always behave like one... Sometimes it is better for everyone to leave clues or to talk in a secretive manner and for the main character to be more intuitive than the other way around, to have everyone being direct and for the main character to be clueless... I say this referring to when she discovers she is Lazarus' mate but she doesn't know what that implies. Also, I couldn't see any chemistry nor sexual tension between the characters, at times it was hard to believe that they had a connection at all... either that, or it seemed like Jena was still a kid hence why she didn't feel anything.
6/3/2019 c2 annabanana1994
What was the point of all this chapter if in the end she was going to agree with him without knowing what she was really signing?
I love your story until now... I can't wait to keep reading it.
What was the point of all this chapter if in the end she was going to agree with him without knowing what she was really signing?
I love your story until now... I can't wait to keep reading it.
7/1/2018 c14 Plsplspls
Im so sad you wont be able to continue this story I was really into it hopefully it comes back up soon it was awesome I love the story you have thought so far as well as the characters
Im so sad you wont be able to continue this story I was really into it hopefully it comes back up soon it was awesome I love the story you have thought so far as well as the characters
11/21/2017 c10 Acie
Great story
Great story
12/15/2016 c14 SailorPikaAngel
I read all the chapters staying up late and am highly intrigued by Lazarus and Jena's story. Lazarus does seem like a tyrant initially but he is trying to protect Jena and is hurt because even though he truly cares and wants to protect her, there are outside dark forces and he needs to prepare her because she was obviously hurt before when he is not there. Jena is overwhelmed but does have fire in her to question and stand up for herself. I'm glad Xavier is finally stepping up and explaining more to her. I'm fascinated by his character and what happens to his soulmate which was briefly touched upon when he touched Jena's mark. I truly hope you will update.
I read all the chapters staying up late and am highly intrigued by Lazarus and Jena's story. Lazarus does seem like a tyrant initially but he is trying to protect Jena and is hurt because even though he truly cares and wants to protect her, there are outside dark forces and he needs to prepare her because she was obviously hurt before when he is not there. Jena is overwhelmed but does have fire in her to question and stand up for herself. I'm glad Xavier is finally stepping up and explaining more to her. I'm fascinated by his character and what happens to his soulmate which was briefly touched upon when he touched Jena's mark. I truly hope you will update.
9/16/2015 c2 Lilypad125
Vitarious? Vitamen Hilarious. I feel that the X character is quite similar to Xiaver from X men.
Vitarious? Vitamen Hilarious. I feel that the X character is quite similar to Xiaver from X men.
6/29/2015 c13 Guest
I read this last year and I was so excited to read the next chapters I'm in love with this story and honestly really in love with Xavier (also Lazarus)...should have read the notice before re-reading the whole story again :(
Well it's a shame this story is not continuing I thought it was great, hopefully it does get updated in the future.
I read this last year and I was so excited to read the next chapters I'm in love with this story and honestly really in love with Xavier (also Lazarus)...should have read the notice before re-reading the whole story again :(
Well it's a shame this story is not continuing I thought it was great, hopefully it does get updated in the future.
5/20/2015 c13 TheNextGamer
Hm, didn't realize this story was discontinued. A shame, but oh well.
Thanks for bringing his story to existence.
Hm, didn't realize this story was discontinued. A shame, but oh well.
Thanks for bringing his story to existence.
5/20/2015 c2 TheNextGamer
I can't help but feel immense dislike for Lazarus from how you introduced him. He feels unrelatable, and I find him to be a bit of a douche. If this was your goal, to make him seem unlikeable at first, then perfectly executed! I just hope you manage to sway my opinion of him in a more positive note in later chapters, if you want me to root for him as a protagonist.
You know, like, add personality besides smug douchebag.
The story seems great though. Keep up the good work!
I can't help but feel immense dislike for Lazarus from how you introduced him. He feels unrelatable, and I find him to be a bit of a douche. If this was your goal, to make him seem unlikeable at first, then perfectly executed! I just hope you manage to sway my opinion of him in a more positive note in later chapters, if you want me to root for him as a protagonist.
You know, like, add personality besides smug douchebag.
The story seems great though. Keep up the good work!
3/29/2015 c12 Lunacrusader
I'm in love with your story. You're building Jena's relationship with everyone, instead of that rushed crap I always see in 95% of the fics I read. And I loved to see things under Xavier's perspective, I wonder if you would write under Lazarus' too? I'd love it even more, under Jena's sight it is really hard to "see" him. Some episodes I particularly would love to re-read in Lazaru's POV.
I noticed you haven't updated since 2013, and I know time is kind of a precious commodity after you start college and work and family etc, but would you post at least a chapter where you explain the story's universe and the conflict which generated this fic? It wouldn't be an end, but I guess at least would satiate some of our thirst... We'd learn more about Charlie and Lazarus too, I believe everyone would love to know their full background.
It's just a suggestion though, and in case you still plan on continuing the story, I'd wait as long as it took to read a new chapter. There are fics I've been accompanying for 10 years, and they're really worth the wait, this wouldn't be different.
Hope to hear from you soon!
I'm in love with your story. You're building Jena's relationship with everyone, instead of that rushed crap I always see in 95% of the fics I read. And I loved to see things under Xavier's perspective, I wonder if you would write under Lazarus' too? I'd love it even more, under Jena's sight it is really hard to "see" him. Some episodes I particularly would love to re-read in Lazaru's POV.
I noticed you haven't updated since 2013, and I know time is kind of a precious commodity after you start college and work and family etc, but would you post at least a chapter where you explain the story's universe and the conflict which generated this fic? It wouldn't be an end, but I guess at least would satiate some of our thirst... We'd learn more about Charlie and Lazarus too, I believe everyone would love to know their full background.
It's just a suggestion though, and in case you still plan on continuing the story, I'd wait as long as it took to read a new chapter. There are fics I've been accompanying for 10 years, and they're really worth the wait, this wouldn't be different.
Hope to hear from you soon!
12/17/2014 c1 markapa
Okay wait, since when is 5'6 and 120 pounds fat? Since when? That's all I can think about while I'm reading this story lol I'm pretty sure that is the ideal bmi for 5'6
Okay wait, since when is 5'6 and 120 pounds fat? Since when? That's all I can think about while I'm reading this story lol I'm pretty sure that is the ideal bmi for 5'6
12/8/2014 c12 aoimythis
Okay where to start? Well first this story is friken amazing! You've done a great job of not falling into easy stereotypes for the female lead and I can actually relate to her (mainly because the comfort of books in a time of crisis is apparently something we have in common). The use of science is genius. I honestly hope you update I nearly cried in public when I noticed this story hasn't been updated in over a year. I WILL HAVE THE HOPE THAT YOU CONTINUE THIS :)
Okay where to start? Well first this story is friken amazing! You've done a great job of not falling into easy stereotypes for the female lead and I can actually relate to her (mainly because the comfort of books in a time of crisis is apparently something we have in common). The use of science is genius. I honestly hope you update I nearly cried in public when I noticed this story hasn't been updated in over a year. I WILL HAVE THE HOPE THAT YOU CONTINUE THIS :)
11/18/2014 c12
1eenitsedStarzz
I adore Lazarus! The dialogue is witty and humorous and the pacing is good as the story progresses. I can't wait to read more and I'm looking forward to their romance blossoming!

I adore Lazarus! The dialogue is witty and humorous and the pacing is good as the story progresses. I can't wait to read more and I'm looking forward to their romance blossoming!
8/17/2014 c1 K
Dude, 5'6" and 120 pounds is actually really skinny. I'm 5'1.5" and 125Lbs and you can see my ribs. Unless her muscle-to-fat ratio is hella fekked up there's no way she's even slightly chubby. Other than that I like your story. You actually have really nice grammar/spelling, which is a nice change.
Dude, 5'6" and 120 pounds is actually really skinny. I'm 5'1.5" and 125Lbs and you can see my ribs. Unless her muscle-to-fat ratio is hella fekked up there's no way she's even slightly chubby. Other than that I like your story. You actually have really nice grammar/spelling, which is a nice change.