for The Power of Destiny11/16/2011 c24 DevilAngel17
I love your stories. They make me fall into the world and become the person. I love a good story to read that helps me stay in it till the end and yours are just the stories. I've almost read all your stories. Are you thinking of making a sequeal to this story, like about their childeren finding their mates and having an adventures of their own?
I love your stories. They make me fall into the world and become the person. I love a good story to read that helps me stay in it till the end and yours are just the stories. I've almost read all your stories. Are you thinking of making a sequeal to this story, like about their childeren finding their mates and having an adventures of their own?
8/25/2011 c24 
2Ray-Anne
I did really like your story, it was very creative and in a cheesy way worked out perfect. However I do have one hint for you..(More in reference to your beginning chapters then ending).. Show do not tell.
Sometimes you wrote everything out and didn't let a reader figure it out if that makes sense. It was too droll at first. It really got better towards the end though.
All the same, still well written.
2Ray-AnneI did really like your story, it was very creative and in a cheesy way worked out perfect. However I do have one hint for you..(More in reference to your beginning chapters then ending).. Show do not tell.
Sometimes you wrote everything out and didn't let a reader figure it out if that makes sense. It was too droll at first. It really got better towards the end though.
All the same, still well written.
8/10/2011 c23 7SecretPassion
um, i know this is finished but one little question, what happened to Natasha at the end? She totally disapeared after Sebastian told Shayla that he took her back to the castle s they could mate. I just think that Shayla should have had her as a daughter, Lucian too.
7SecretPassionum, i know this is finished but one little question, what happened to Natasha at the end? She totally disapeared after Sebastian told Shayla that he took her back to the castle s they could mate. I just think that Shayla should have had her as a daughter, Lucian too.
7/30/2011 c23 Fantasy's Dreamer
aww how cute they have kids already but i don't think the parents are going to start telling their children how they all met. :D
great story loved every minute of it
aww how cute they have kids already but i don't think the parents are going to start telling their children how they all met. :D
great story loved every minute of it
7/29/2011 c24 GrumpyToaster13
Hey,
Awww, I can't believe it's finished, but I'm happy with the way it ended. I will bea sure to check out your other stuff as well. Keep writing!
~GrumpyToaster13
Hey,
Awww, I can't believe it's finished, but I'm happy with the way it ended. I will bea sure to check out your other stuff as well. Keep writing!
~GrumpyToaster13
7/23/2011 c21 GrumpyToaster13
Hey,
Wow! I really love this story! It's just so sweet and I was hoping Brittney would be Mateo's mate. Please post the next chapter soon!
~GrumpyToaster13
Hey,
Wow! I really love this story! It's just so sweet and I was hoping Brittney would be Mateo's mate. Please post the next chapter soon!
~GrumpyToaster13
7/20/2011 c21 the.sky.angel
awww... i liked lance.. he was my favourite. very very sad moment... love it though... untill next time.
awww... i liked lance.. he was my favourite. very very sad moment... love it though... untill next time.
7/15/2011 c6 7drats
awesome story.
These sentences - 'Lucian set Shayla down on the couch, Madeline hovering over his shoulder. "What happened?" she asked. She had assumed the worse when she saw Lucian carrying Shayla in and her eyes were closed. When she had opened her eyes she had sighed in relief, but then she had seen the burn marks on her stomach.'
- go again Madeline being blind, and it also doesn't speicify who is doing the sighing and seeing burn marks so you may want to fix that up as to not confuse.
7dratsawesome story.
These sentences - 'Lucian set Shayla down on the couch, Madeline hovering over his shoulder. "What happened?" she asked. She had assumed the worse when she saw Lucian carrying Shayla in and her eyes were closed. When she had opened her eyes she had sighed in relief, but then she had seen the burn marks on her stomach.'
- go again Madeline being blind, and it also doesn't speicify who is doing the sighing and seeing burn marks so you may want to fix that up as to not confuse.