for Dilemmas of a Class Clown7/29/2012 c1 Guest
I love this story! I dont usually read one shots but this is one of the best i have read in a while! Kudos to you!
I love this story! I dont usually read one shots but this is one of the best i have read in a while! Kudos to you!
6/21/2012 c1 
16Simplegift96
Ha! This was awesome! And I don't know why, but when I read the title, I couldn't help but say it in a posh accent..
16Simplegift96Ha! This was awesome! And I don't know why, but when I read the title, I couldn't help but say it in a posh accent..
8/27/2011 c1 anonymous
i agree with another of your reviewers, that arianna sounds a lot like barney stinson.
i agree with another of your reviewers, that arianna sounds a lot like barney stinson.
6/4/2011 c1 1TheLastFireBender
awesome story it was cute nd simple nd they wuld probably make a rlli cute couple xoxo :D
1TheLastFireBenderawesome story it was cute nd simple nd they wuld probably make a rlli cute couple xoxo :D
4/14/2011 c1 8DorkExpress
Dude, I had plastere plastered on my face since like before I read it!
I totally loved it, so much fluff, I can read it again and again!
XOXO
8DorkExpressDude, I had plastere plastered on my face since like before I read it!
I totally loved it, so much fluff, I can read it again and again!
XOXO
1/30/2011 c1 Bubbly Girl
Haha! :) This one-shot was hilarious! :) Great Job! :)
Peace, Love and Happiness! :)
~Bubbly Girl
Haha! :) This one-shot was hilarious! :) Great Job! :)
Peace, Love and Happiness! :)
~Bubbly Girl
11/19/2010 c1 chocolate and bananas
"Harriet slammed her locker closed" is grammatically incorrect - it should be close instead of closed.
Actually, I think the fact that the dialogue sounds a little too forced is my main concern here, and honestly, it sort of turned me off, leading me not to finish the entire oneshot (not very polite of me, I know. Sorry about that).
Other than some polishing up, which I think you really need to do (every author needs to do a few revisions before a truly great work is born), it was more or less passable for a first oneshot.
Keep on writing, and keep on getting better.
Signed,
chocolate and bananas.
"Harriet slammed her locker closed" is grammatically incorrect - it should be close instead of closed.
Actually, I think the fact that the dialogue sounds a little too forced is my main concern here, and honestly, it sort of turned me off, leading me not to finish the entire oneshot (not very polite of me, I know. Sorry about that).
Other than some polishing up, which I think you really need to do (every author needs to do a few revisions before a truly great work is born), it was more or less passable for a first oneshot.
Keep on writing, and keep on getting better.
Signed,
chocolate and bananas.
10/8/2010 c1 Sofie
And I forgot to mention her love for lasertag. She reminds me of a female less-womanizing Barney Stinson. heh.
Also LURVE the zoolander reference, made me lol
And I forgot to mention her love for lasertag. She reminds me of a female less-womanizing Barney Stinson. heh.
Also LURVE the zoolander reference, made me lol