for A Child's Prayer2/26/2011 c1 
612simpleplan13
I liked the piece because it was really sweet. I thought you captured the tone of a child and what would be on a child's mind really well. The only thing is a lot of the rhymes seemed really forced, especially the part about the brother making her mad and the sheep/sleep at the end.
Again thanks for the reviews!
612simpleplan13I liked the piece because it was really sweet. I thought you captured the tone of a child and what would be on a child's mind really well. The only thing is a lot of the rhymes seemed really forced, especially the part about the brother making her mad and the sheep/sleep at the end.
Again thanks for the reviews!
6/17/2010 c1 Needa S
Very cute. Awesome job as well. Write on and thanks for the kind review. God Bless.
Very cute. Awesome job as well. Write on and thanks for the kind review. God Bless.
6/16/2010 c1 1esthaelum
Hehe. I loved this. As always, I think you managed to successfully write like a child. I love how this jsut has that upbeat, naive mood to it. I also like how the child prayed for cute things like her teddy bear and her toys. That was just adorable...
1esthaelumHehe. I loved this. As always, I think you managed to successfully write like a child. I love how this jsut has that upbeat, naive mood to it. I also like how the child prayed for cute things like her teddy bear and her toys. That was just adorable...
6/15/2010 c1 47Dave500
Wow, how did you find my poem, thank you. Your poem is very nice also, in fact i think it's better than mine.
It had been so long since i'd been on FP that it took me a couple minutes to remember my password (I had changed them all except this one) Anyway, good luck to you and keep writing
47Dave500Wow, how did you find my poem, thank you. Your poem is very nice also, in fact i think it's better than mine.
It had been so long since i'd been on FP that it took me a couple minutes to remember my password (I had changed them all except this one) Anyway, good luck to you and keep writing
6/15/2010 c1 2The Jab
Wow, that sounded like a legit prayer. Haha, it's got a really solid rhyme scheme. It was pretty cute too. I'm not someone who should really be judging poetry, but whateverr. Ha, it was good though :) I don't know how anyone could put down an adorable little blurb like this though.
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2The JabWow, that sounded like a legit prayer. Haha, it's got a really solid rhyme scheme. It was pretty cute too. I'm not someone who should really be judging poetry, but whateverr. Ha, it was good though :) I don't know how anyone could put down an adorable little blurb like this though.
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6/15/2010 c1 1JaffaFoose
Aw... to infinity, and beyond.
This was absolutely adorable. I was grinning goofily through the entire thing. It reminds me of a kid I know, so much so that I was pictures him kneeling by his bed and saying this to God. I think we all know a precious little child who we could picture saying this. You capture the essence of childlike innocence BEAUTIFULLY.
Seriously, I can’t think of anything to complain about. You did a great job keeping your version in line with the first two lines of the real version.
I basically just loved this.
1JaffaFooseAw... to infinity, and beyond.
This was absolutely adorable. I was grinning goofily through the entire thing. It reminds me of a kid I know, so much so that I was pictures him kneeling by his bed and saying this to God. I think we all know a precious little child who we could picture saying this. You capture the essence of childlike innocence BEAUTIFULLY.
Seriously, I can’t think of anything to complain about. You did a great job keeping your version in line with the first two lines of the real version.
I basically just loved this.