for The Night Terror5/16/2011 c1 
21songbirdalice
This was...interesting. Use woman colors when describing things; what I mean by that is chocolate, sky, emory. Not man words like black, brown, yellow. Your descriptions can be better, I know they can. Now that it is 2011 and your writing has improved, you should rewrite. :)
21songbirdaliceThis was...interesting. Use woman colors when describing things; what I mean by that is chocolate, sky, emory. Not man words like black, brown, yellow. Your descriptions can be better, I know they can. Now that it is 2011 and your writing has improved, you should rewrite. :)