for Little Anne7/11/2010 c1 
124in theory
I love the rhythm here, it's very well established, it literally bounces. I also liked the whimsical, almost fairy-tale quality of it, it hinted at deeper meanings without being sodden with them. Nice job :)
Jack
124in theoryI love the rhythm here, it's very well established, it literally bounces. I also liked the whimsical, almost fairy-tale quality of it, it hinted at deeper meanings without being sodden with them. Nice job :)
Jack
7/11/2010 c1 11HiddenFromYou
This was interesting. I liked how it felt like a children's poem for adults (if that makes sense) with the simple language used in quite a sophisticated way.
I didn't like that the message in the poem was so hard to see. I'm sure there's a deeper meaning than food poisoning, but I can't see it.
11HiddenFromYouThis was interesting. I liked how it felt like a children's poem for adults (if that makes sense) with the simple language used in quite a sophisticated way.
I didn't like that the message in the poem was so hard to see. I'm sure there's a deeper meaning than food poisoning, but I can't see it.