12/5/2010 c2 sakura
Hi again! I'm sorry for being so pushy, but this story is one of my favourites and I'm really impatient to see what happens next. I love Alex, Teal, the plot, your writing style and everything about your story in general! So can you please update soon? I mean pretty please?
Hi again! I'm sorry for being so pushy, but this story is one of my favourites and I'm really impatient to see what happens next. I love Alex, Teal, the plot, your writing style and everything about your story in general! So can you please update soon? I mean pretty please?
11/15/2010 c2 3NopeNopeNope14
Why hasn't this been updated recently? This is pure gold! YOU MUST CONTINUE!
Why hasn't this been updated recently? This is pure gold! YOU MUST CONTINUE!
11/11/2010 c2 4SucculentAmbush
Hi! I'm reviewing! Okay, I really really like this chapter. :) Can't wait to see what happens next and I'm really hoping this story turns into all-out brothercest. They seem like one of those ridiculously uncompatiable pairs that should never make it as a couple but end up in a fabulous long term relationship. :P
Hi! I'm reviewing! Okay, I really really like this chapter. :) Can't wait to see what happens next and I'm really hoping this story turns into all-out brothercest. They seem like one of those ridiculously uncompatiable pairs that should never make it as a couple but end up in a fabulous long term relationship. :P
11/4/2010 c2 16saamf 44
Oh shit. I love reading this!(even thought I noticed 1 or 2 grammatical errors) This is probably one of the best stories I've ever read O.O And I usually don't read these kinds of stories.
The title made me very curious, but it's not what I would call a perfect title. I'm sure there's one somewhere but I didn't find it yet.
I would probably spend it with Teal because he sounds very...unique:P
Oh shit. I love reading this!(even thought I noticed 1 or 2 grammatical errors) This is probably one of the best stories I've ever read O.O And I usually don't read these kinds of stories.
The title made me very curious, but it's not what I would call a perfect title. I'm sure there's one somewhere but I didn't find it yet.
I would probably spend it with Teal because he sounds very...unique:P
11/2/2010 c2 VioletNight97
Oh my god! i love this story,and the characters especially teal xDD
PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE! ill love you forever if you do so pwease update! X)
Oh my god! i love this story,and the characters especially teal xDD
PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE! ill love you forever if you do so pwease update! X)
10/31/2010 c2 3Daydream Nation
This a really interesting premise for a story, and I especially loved the wittiness of the summary. I also love the character's voice, especially since it shows a lot of self-consciousness, and self-consciousness is always nice. He does come off as a bit of a cold jerk though, but I suppose that's part of his character. Overall, it seems really promising & I really like it. ;)
This a really interesting premise for a story, and I especially loved the wittiness of the summary. I also love the character's voice, especially since it shows a lot of self-consciousness, and self-consciousness is always nice. He does come off as a bit of a cold jerk though, but I suppose that's part of his character. Overall, it seems really promising & I really like it. ;)
10/30/2010 c2 MysticLilyGarden
I am now officially addicted. I can't wait to see what happens. I hope you update soon. x
I am now officially addicted. I can't wait to see what happens. I hope you update soon. x
10/27/2010 c2 pygmy owl
Oh wow. I think I'm going to love this story. Can't wait to see how it's going to develop!
Oh wow. I think I'm going to love this story. Can't wait to see how it's going to develop!
10/25/2010 c2 rldarling
Ohmygod you are killing me. I didn't realize when I started reading that there were only two chapters and now I am absolutely DYING FOR MORE.
XD
This is why I try not to read fics that are just getting started, but the title seduced me and I adore Alex's POV so much. He sounds so delightfully put off and now in Chapter 2 I'm like, drooling to see him meet Teal and Erin and go to school and get to know his mom. Which I guess tells you who I want to spend a day with... Alex, totally. But I wonder about Erin, and I love Teal's name. :D
Ohmygod you are killing me. I didn't realize when I started reading that there were only two chapters and now I am absolutely DYING FOR MORE.
XD
This is why I try not to read fics that are just getting started, but the title seduced me and I adore Alex's POV so much. He sounds so delightfully put off and now in Chapter 2 I'm like, drooling to see him meet Teal and Erin and go to school and get to know his mom. Which I guess tells you who I want to spend a day with... Alex, totally. But I wonder about Erin, and I love Teal's name. :D
10/19/2010 c2 shiverfox
Ahahaha. I hope this complicates things for Teal, that *. Nice story, I like the meeting between Alicia and Alex. I didn't find it too awkward and it seems to signify the beginning of a nice, strong relationship between the two. The last part was especially enjoyable, when Teal came back home. I wonder if Teal is a delinquent, though, with all of those scars and class-cutting :/
Ahahaha. I hope this complicates things for Teal, that *. Nice story, I like the meeting between Alicia and Alex. I didn't find it too awkward and it seems to signify the beginning of a nice, strong relationship between the two. The last part was especially enjoyable, when Teal came back home. I wonder if Teal is a delinquent, though, with all of those scars and class-cutting :/
10/16/2010 c2 Lina
Awesome! This story sounds really interesting, found out about it on the Chemistry website :)
Update soon! :D
Awesome! This story sounds really interesting, found out about it on the Chemistry website :)
Update soon! :D
10/15/2010 c2 DemonsOfTheMind
Hi Xephia, thx for the update!
I like the way you write this, just as much as I like Rough Diamond. Your style is relaxed, describing surroundings but not too much. It's easy to read so the actual plot draws you in deeper.
Great idea to let a arrogant top be an insecure bottom! Most arrogant people are acting that way because they feel secure in a routine, get them out of it and they either become sky and very careful, or they get moody. xD
And then for the questions you asked (I felt like anwsering them too):
I love the title, it fits the story better as Rough Diamond does with the other actually. The title implies something sexual, while in the mean time it makes me think of someone thinking "oh, damn...". It works, don't change it. ;)
I would spend a day with Teal. Since I know a lot of people like Alex, Teal would be more interesting. His mom seems to think he is an ordinary kid, while he's way more. I have the feeling something happened to him, making him act arrogant while being insecure or trying to ignore some thoughts he has about something.
Good luck with writing this and Rough Diamond! Thank you for your original stories and refreshing style.
I would love to beta read, but since I'm Dutch, I can only advise about dialogue, speed and settings. No grammar checks from me. If you would like me to beta read, mail me or contact me on Twitter: & LuciaPitstra.
Thx again!
Lucia
Hi Xephia, thx for the update!
I like the way you write this, just as much as I like Rough Diamond. Your style is relaxed, describing surroundings but not too much. It's easy to read so the actual plot draws you in deeper.
Great idea to let a arrogant top be an insecure bottom! Most arrogant people are acting that way because they feel secure in a routine, get them out of it and they either become sky and very careful, or they get moody. xD
And then for the questions you asked (I felt like anwsering them too):
I love the title, it fits the story better as Rough Diamond does with the other actually. The title implies something sexual, while in the mean time it makes me think of someone thinking "oh, damn...". It works, don't change it. ;)
I would spend a day with Teal. Since I know a lot of people like Alex, Teal would be more interesting. His mom seems to think he is an ordinary kid, while he's way more. I have the feeling something happened to him, making him act arrogant while being insecure or trying to ignore some thoughts he has about something.
Good luck with writing this and Rough Diamond! Thank you for your original stories and refreshing style.
I would love to beta read, but since I'm Dutch, I can only advise about dialogue, speed and settings. No grammar checks from me. If you would like me to beta read, mail me or contact me on Twitter: & LuciaPitstra.
Thx again!
Lucia