for Someone Save Me From The Hate7/21/2010 c1 
2Bond x Lei
Good afternoon!
You're pretty good at showing and not telling, which is a great skill to have! You have an interesting start. If you don't know where you're going, I'd suggest some true hero moves from Kayle. Perhaps Snitch gets in over her head, and Kayle is there to truly rescue her? A good story is never without some good drama, action, and climax! :)
You have a great writing style and a good grasp of how to write so I'm really looking forward to what you have next.
J.D. DeShaw
2Bond x LeiGood afternoon!
You're pretty good at showing and not telling, which is a great skill to have! You have an interesting start. If you don't know where you're going, I'd suggest some true hero moves from Kayle. Perhaps Snitch gets in over her head, and Kayle is there to truly rescue her? A good story is never without some good drama, action, and climax! :)
You have a great writing style and a good grasp of how to write so I'm really looking forward to what you have next.
J.D. DeShaw