8/27/2010 c1 Kaylie13
I like this one a LOT better than the other version. It's longer and it describes everything better,good job! It could be better, but I suck at poems so I have no business saying that because I wouldnt even be able to give you ideas, but I do have one and it doesnt matter where you put it...

"Theres too many allies

wich I have yet not seen

theres only chaos

underneath the smiles

that are not as real

as they truly seem to be"



I dont know, I'm not good with poetry and all.And to be honest that was probably my best and it wasnt THAT good.

7/22/2010 c1 7mistyx7
You'd better be happy that I'm reviewing because you don't accept anonymous reviews . . . humbug . . . *mumble, mumble, silly, mumble*.

It's a really good poem! Probably your best one!