for Land of the Saints8/3/2010 c1 
1checkyesdana
I really like the new style of writing. I like to see how both people react to a situation in the same moment, rather than a blurb in their POV section. I didn't find the switching confusing.
I'm so glad you're back! this looks soo good =)
1checkyesdanaI really like the new style of writing. I like to see how both people react to a situation in the same moment, rather than a blurb in their POV section. I didn't find the switching confusing.
I'm so glad you're back! this looks soo good =)
8/3/2010 c1 Power Rangers
This is a good beginning. I can definitely see an improvement from you belong with me. I like how you made Peyton's attraction to Kyler appear natural and it didn't come on to strong.
Also, I love how you connect all your stories by family relationships, it's quite original and it doesn't come on to strongly.
Congrats on your skow nomination!
.nell.
This is a good beginning. I can definitely see an improvement from you belong with me. I like how you made Peyton's attraction to Kyler appear natural and it didn't come on to strong.
Also, I love how you connect all your stories by family relationships, it's quite original and it doesn't come on to strongly.
Congrats on your skow nomination!
.nell.
8/3/2010 c1 kfjhbvasiuhvauvba
I love the story already; it just seems so interesting. And I love that your two series kind of connect.
I feel so slow; when I saw the titles for the stories in this series I knew Saint would be part of the chatacters' last names, but I didn't think it would be the St. James, so when I saw Kyler's last name I ws shocked and happy. I love stories/ series that have some sort of connection.
I love the story already; it just seems so interesting. And I love that your two series kind of connect.
I feel so slow; when I saw the titles for the stories in this series I knew Saint would be part of the chatacters' last names, but I didn't think it would be the St. James, so when I saw Kyler's last name I ws shocked and happy. I love stories/ series that have some sort of connection.
8/2/2010 c1 1goodbyemylover
This was a great first chapter! You've got me hooked and I can't wait to read more!
keep it up!
1goodbyemyloverThis was a great first chapter! You've got me hooked and I can't wait to read more!
keep it up!
8/2/2010 c1 1Midnight113
That was awesome, I'm already hooked. I can see they are trying to keep this as formal as possible, yeah right, lol. That's going to blow up in their faces right? I love all the scenarios I'm envisioning with this and Keely is so sweet. I like that she's trying to break the tension of all business. Oh and I'm loving that you've brought that Dalton southern tongue into this with Kyler, Whoo - I can just imagine it on this guy perfectly. Working on a ranch all half naked and sweaty... *sigh*. Anyway, lol. I'm excited for more of this, can't wait!
1Midnight113That was awesome, I'm already hooked. I can see they are trying to keep this as formal as possible, yeah right, lol. That's going to blow up in their faces right? I love all the scenarios I'm envisioning with this and Keely is so sweet. I like that she's trying to break the tension of all business. Oh and I'm loving that you've brought that Dalton southern tongue into this with Kyler, Whoo - I can just imagine it on this guy perfectly. Working on a ranch all half naked and sweaty... *sigh*. Anyway, lol. I'm excited for more of this, can't wait!
8/2/2010 c1 2aznImperfection
A girl from New York meets the oh so good looking southern boy? oh la la! hahaha. I lovee it, I can't wait for more x] update soon! :D
2aznImperfectionA girl from New York meets the oh so good looking southern boy? oh la la! hahaha. I lovee it, I can't wait for more x] update soon! :D
8/2/2010 c1 uhhmazing
ooh, this story is looking great.
it seems like it'll be an interesting new series.
good job on the first chapter!
update soon!
ooh, this story is looking great.
it seems like it'll be an interesting new series.
good job on the first chapter!
update soon!
8/2/2010 c1 3ShadowBrilliance
Huh , wasn't Keely and Dalton dating ? Ohh , I get it now . So this series is VERY loosely connected with the other ? Ehh , but just very loosely ? Hmm , I guess so . Anyways , I liike it so far , keep updating ! =)
@KymTea
3ShadowBrillianceHuh , wasn't Keely and Dalton dating ? Ohh , I get it now . So this series is VERY loosely connected with the other ? Ehh , but just very loosely ? Hmm , I guess so . Anyways , I liike it so far , keep updating ! =)
@KymTea
8/2/2010 c1 Nellie
This IS good stuff. And prior to that, I have to mention that its unfortunate since I am hooked! Awaiting your next chapter! :D
This IS good stuff. And prior to that, I have to mention that its unfortunate since I am hooked! Awaiting your next chapter! :D
8/2/2010 c1 5AmandaHold
i'm excited for this series. the st. james family sounds very interesting. kyler and peyton are so different. update soon =)
5AmandaHoldi'm excited for this series. the st. james family sounds very interesting. kyler and peyton are so different. update soon =)
8/2/2010 c1 MissIndependant
Nice first chapter. Peyton is pretty uptight but i'm guessing that she'll warm up to Kylar soon enough. I also love how most of your stories are connected, even though it takes me some time to process it since i'm that slow but i still love it.Btw happy belated birthday i hope you had a good one.
Nice first chapter. Peyton is pretty uptight but i'm guessing that she'll warm up to Kylar soon enough. I also love how most of your stories are connected, even though it takes me some time to process it since i'm that slow but i still love it.Btw happy belated birthday i hope you had a good one.